Jannie Breedt Poet Sonnet

The Unbroken Mare

In ghostly dreams the horse will come
And feed on my forbidden cereal
Meant for my recalcitrant healing
That filly came a-prancing stealing

O shrouded mare so misted white
Thou bleakest horse ,this blackest night
Untethered and untied
Noble creature -"NOT"- I cried

A pallid stare through tousled mane
Treads the core of my hidden pain
So obvious now for all to see
My fear complies to jellyfied fragility

Hope drifts lost in catatonic misery
As does my scream in muted agony
Nostrils flared in malarial trembling
Gasps aloud from injurious dreaming

Departing tail of comets flight
Leaves me such a prophetic sight

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Gregory Richard Barden December 2, 2017 at 5:47 PM I remember this, Jannie, as those about horses stand out in my mind, and it reminded me of my childhood book about Alexander the Great and Bucephalus! Had to come read it again - love this! :-) Jannie Breedt December 4, 2017 at 2:09 AM Thanks Greg Now I have to do some research about the Great Alexander. I changed the last stanza. It was written for a beautiful girl who stayed here as a recovering CAT addict BEFORE she was arrested for steaing and finally left without saying goodbye. A vision that came. I now fear the worst.

Patricia Cresswell August 20, 2017 at 9:27 AM Jannie this harks back to the Pookah myth of the Celts. I love your style, as I read, it felt like riding a charger, galloping galloping across my mind. Jannie Breedt August 25, 2017 at 1:40 AM Hi Patricia,so I googled this . The similarities are quite amazing. I cant explain it but the spjrit of the muse grabs me and this comes forth from goodness knows where. Closer to home , many of our Blacks believe in the "Tokoloshe" and are petrified of him. They sleep thus on raised beds so he cannot reach them at night. The beds are raised on 5liter paint tins or bricks under each post Jannie Breedt August 21, 2017 at 1:31 AM Well now there is something I was completely unaware of and it certainly requires some research which I will duly attend to. Its one of my favorites. Thank you for that Patricia

Agnes Krampe April 18, 2017 at 7:05 AM Your first line drew me into your poem's eerie atmosphere. Quite a ride. Jannie Breedt May 3, 2017 at 1:16 AM Hi Agnes, thank you for your kind words and the visit.

Robert Lindley April 4, 2017 at 7:47 PM Truly exceptional sonnet-eering my friend. Every verse golden and that closing fantastic . Super 7 and a fav.... A fine gem .. LOVE THE OPENING AND THE BUILD UP BRINGING SUCH A DEEP ENDING! Jannie Breedt April 4, 2017 at 10:30 PM Robert I am bounding with joy because I received 5 new comments this morning and yours is so welcome. Big thànk you as with Greg below

Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2017 at 11:27 AM Love this poem, love horses, love your fresh style of writing, my friend! I'm particularly fond of Arabians, and I do work for the owner of Godolphin Stables, the finest in the world. Really enjoyed this one! Blessings, Buddy. :-) Jannie Breedt April 4, 2017 at 10:27 PM I am admitting that this one is my own favorite Too. I am doing somersaults here.Coming from you , that is BIG . I say thank you Greg

Freddie Robinson Jr. April 2, 2017 at 2:26 PM An equestrian night-mare, eh. This is one creative piece of poetry, Jannie. Can't wait to read the other two parts, my friend. I love your turbo-charged style of poetry. Leaves us mere mortals thinking in the dust. With you on your speed steed send thought exhaust while zooming past the rest of us. Your poems seems to always bring out creative critiques from me. Love this poem though. Love and peace to you. Jannie Breedt April 2, 2017 at 4:08 PM I can only smile here. Its like getting milk and cookies aa I told Cay Cay. Bless the whole bloody lot of you ha ha

Pashang Salehi March 19, 2017 at 2:10 AM This is really cute... I too love horses.. Jannie Breedt March 19, 2017 at 4:30 AM Cute???

Connie Marcum Wong March 16, 2017 at 3:04 AM I LOVE THIS Jannie! It is going straight into my FAVES! It is a delight and my privilege to read. Blessings, Connie : ) 7+ Jannie Breedt March 17, 2017 at 8:41 AM Hi Connie,glad to see you . Thanks. Is Hawai still there? Love Jannie

Deborah Burch March 13, 2017 at 2:44 PM Jannie. This is a jewel! I look forward to reading more :) I love the last quatrain most!! Very well done my friend! big hugs deb Jannie Breedt March 14, 2017 at 8:12 AM Hey Debra, arent you the horsey lady? This one is for you. Thank you, it makes my whole Tuesday alive