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The Twenty Third Precinct

The place, the Twenty Third Precinct, Brooklyn, Vice. Detective Rodney Townsend, The time, four thirty a.m. Report of incident, death of one John Doe. Ally on the fourteen hundred block, Forth street. The deceased IE; perp is a white male, approximately thirty five years old with lots of tattoos, some of them are kind of indistinguishable. Hair, black, Mustache, black...Lots of rings. The victim, person attacked, Maria Wiegold, tagged for prostitution seventeen times in the past five years, was apparently in the process of being beaten and strangled in said ally. She said the perp had a knife, the Homicide boys said it was a flensing knife, I had to look that up. Flensing knife, I'll have to remember that. The perp was struck down before he could kill her. Is this the Ripper? I think we got us a live one here, in a manner of speaking. Maybe the killings will stop now, by the Grace of God! " Yo, Brick"! " What do ya want Mikey, I'm kinda busy here. " I done some checking with the ME, and your ice berg aint the Rip" He's the broads Pimp, name's Gino Rondo" " arm long rap sheet, attempted murder more assaults than I can count" " Your lucky you can count to ten Mikey, and that's with your shoes off" "Awe Brick, cut it out, will ya"! " Cheese Whiz, Mikey, I thought we had this one in the bag" " You always was a hard luck story Brick" Yeah, yeah, I'm goin down to the Morgue, check on our stiff. " William thirty Baker, central, show me 10-9 at central morgue, I'll be on portable if you need me" " Central, William thirty Baker, will do Brick". Yeah.... " Hullo Doc"! " Hello Brick"! " I'm here for the skinny on my stiff" " You mean MY stiff, don't you"? " Well....the Skinny as you call it, is, One cut, powerful, downward thrust, begins at the breastbone and ends at the groin" " Very precise, almost surgical, except"! " Except what Doc?" " I don't know any surgeons that use a sword to cut into people" " You sure Doc?" " Quite sure Brick, I've seen something like this before, in Japan...If I miss my guess, this was done with a Japanese Katana". Samurai !!!

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Date: 2/10/2010 9:47:00 AM
great story, you kept my interest till the end, alot of the longer poems llose me, but great!!
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Date: 1/23/2010 4:29:00 PM
thank you for everything.
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Date: 1/8/2010 9:52:00 PM
nice job i really like all your poems its really inspiring thanks
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Date: 1/6/2010 9:43:00 AM
well the road only begins for this write my friend keep this one going still want to read more
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Date: 1/4/2010 7:36:00 AM
This narrative is AHHHMAZZIINNGG!!! I love it. Continue on your work. Hey, maybe you can even help me write my musical. Great writing, and happy holidays :P. - Daniel
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Date: 1/3/2010 6:56:00 PM
Unique story Taz ... were u ever a NYPD or cop..in the Big Apple?.. u seem to have nailed their daily routine perfectly.. luv the last line about the Japanese Katana.. nice write ... enjoyed ... blessings... luv... Linda-Marie
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Date: 1/3/2010 10:50:00 AM
new poem posted
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Date: 1/1/2010 9:06:00 PM
You're a good storyteller Richard! Great job! Thanks for your comments on my poems! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 1/1/2010 1:55:00 PM
What I've seen is a beginning saga that holds one's interest quit well Richard. It holds the hero image, that is much revered in todays society. A very interesting Narrative. Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 1/1/2010 12:29:00 PM
Loved this story..makes me wanting more--Charma
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Date: 1/1/2010 11:53:00 AM
BRICK ! . You huv soup mail !- SAMU !!!
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Date: 1/1/2010 11:44:00 AM
And so it is continuing on....very ensnaring read here....filled with vivid imagery and the storyline is great...keep them coming babe! I know you will! I love you! Hugs~Mary
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Date: 1/1/2010 9:20:00 AM
Hi Taz,Wow! You can really write. I think you should keep going with this turn it into a novel. Your story line coupled with your amazing talent for words really had me captivated line for line. Truly enjoyed my friend, what a way to start the New Year!! Thanks to hun for your most welcome comment and fav. of Sacred Walk one and two. Meant a lot to me. Happy New Year to you and yours!! Love Light Patty
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