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The Tumid River of Acheron -The Journey Part One-Revised

The Tumid River of Acheron (the journey) Part One-Revised Darkly, the tumid rushing waters flow where any man most wisely fears to go. Liquid blackness singing in epic pain torture, misery and cries of insane! Echoes of Eperius in the West, shadow realm wherein evil never rests. Black ship of Kharon eternally sail into the sunless land of a dark hell. Land of those lost , family and dear friend exists for all wicked women and men! Black abyss where Apollo never walks, lost souls ripped apart by screeching hawks. Forever filled and by rowboat conveyed miserable, crying souls are relayed. Crossing the tarn of Acheron then, cursing future torments for all lost men. Seething waters that ever separate, those so damn lost to future tortured Fate. Father of evil waters from which sprang, the river Styx of which man's curses rang. Flowing stream holding back evil so foul, where agonizing spirits scream and howl. Acheron, seething lake of scorching heat where demons slash into the souls they eat! Delivered shadows fall onto prayers cast, vanity briefly soothes, forever lasts. Prayers sinking quickly like river cast stones, dreams forming into ghastly skin and bones! Waters that wrap around Haides evil realm with Daimon, evil dark Lord at the helm. Gushing forth from solid bowels of rock, rushing blackened waters rising to shock. Upon its moving mass of wretched stink poison lethal no mortal man may drink. Kharon, the ferryman stands at the oars delivering the lost upon dark shores. Far below the Mariandyni coast, Acheron ferries victims to its host. Loaded within spirits of cries and moans Kharon laughs at all the misery groans! Set upon southern shore of the black sea in sun's light never again will they be. Many dark tales of Acheron's fame, fallen victims weeping in sin and shame. Moans rising as dark waters deliver the wretched lost to painfully quiver. In this dark abhorrent , torturing Hell lost souls living in lustful sin had fell. Robert J. Lindley, (revised) - 04-10-2015 Syllables Per Line: 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 Total # Syllables: 480 Total # Lines: 48 Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A Total # Words: 321 Note: This is part one. The journey into HAIDES by way of crossing the Styx. The river Styx is actually an off shoot of Acheron that splits into the Styx and the Cocytus. Part two now has two lines written. It will be titled , Haides and Tormented Souls (the Dwelling).. I have no preset limit to the second part, may be longer or shorter. I suspect it will be even longer. I hope the readers enjoy this write. I wanted to do something dark and move away from all my love, romance and Nature writes. A bit of variety to stir my imagination...

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Date: 4/11/2015 8:44:00 AM
Very good Robert, I enjoyed the form and rhyme,they offer a smooth easy read. Your message is clear and understandable. The descriptive wording creates the environment you seek without being distracting. I enjoyed the 10 syllable discipline you wrote in, it makes for a balanced feel in the read. This effort is successful and I too look forward to the next installment. I'm sure you know long writes are hard to get readership or comments so keep the faith.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 4/11/2015 11:01:00 AM
Yes, thanks amigo.. Part two is on hold as of now. Have my mother to care for as she is very ill.... I see those first two verses everyday ,lying there on paper beckoning me to race in but life comes first. Thanks for commenting my friend! Yes long writes tend to be not commented on as often. Everybody seems to be short of time these days....
Date: 4/11/2015 2:38:00 AM
Awesome write, Robert...a 7. Can't wait to see Part 2. Do we get notification? All the best. Kim :)
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Date: 4/11/2015 10:57:00 AM
Sorry but part two is on indefinite hold as I care for my very ill mother. Simply haven't the time nor the willpower to tackle it right now. As it was to be longer, broader and more in-depth than this first part.. Those first two lines sit their on paper beckoning me but they must wait. But thanks for commenting and asking!

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