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The Track of a Storm

A storm is brewing, slow, but strong and those who do so many wrong shall pay their price - and when the gong does sound, they all shall fade. And we shall axe, it shan't be long, The palace's charade.* On pompous thrones adorned with gold they sit, so wrongly smug and bold. They know no word for kind - So cold and merciless their speech. But soon their might as we foretold cannot our purpose reach. A storm is brewing, slow but sure - Its last defeat shall be our cure. Our tyrant's ways shall not recur - our bolt will find its mark. Their royal fate they shall incur... we'll watch the skies turn dark. -------------------------------------------------------- From the POV of an oppressed citizen before the French Revolution - Title from The Tale of Two Cities. * 'Charade' here (American) rhymes with fade. Burns Stanza variation

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Ashok Kumar Mishra

Date: 4/3/2018 11:53:00 PM

well expressed!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/18/2016 2:48:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Eve Roper

Date: 6/8/2016 5:35:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Sneha! Hugs Eve

Manmath Dalei

Date: 5/3/2016 8:00:00 AM

Sneha, Wonderful creation & nice concept. A 7 from me..........with love

Sneha Rv
Date: 5/3/2016 8:23:00 AM

Thanks a lot; glad you like it!! :) :)

Paul Callus

Date: 5/1/2016 7:53:00 AM

You have done extremely well, Sneha. You recount the sentiments of the people that would eventually lead to the start of the revolution. I have never written this form...now you tempt me! ~ Regards // paul

Ashok Kumar Mishra
Date: 4/3/2018 11:51:00 PM

nice example you have shared! thanks!

Sneha Rv
Date: 5/1/2016 8:26:00 AM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment; so glad you like it!! The form is so interesting.. I found it on http://www.volecentral.co.uk/vf/burns.htm; the example is amazinG :) :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/1/2016 12:42:00 AM

I am not sure you know, I love french history, many of my poems are based on France culture, I Loved this poem! :)

Sneha Rv
Date: 5/1/2016 8:27:00 AM

Thank you so much! That's lovely.. I will surely visit your site! :) :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/18/2016 11:56:00 PM

This is a awesome poem Sneha! Very moving. An inspiration from the Tale of Two Cities. This is sure to be in the top winners. I loved it! : )

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/19/2016 8:19:00 AM

Thank you so much, dear Connie!! So happy you like it!! :) :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/18/2016 3:34:00 PM

Such a great take on the theme, Sneha! Very powerful and nicely done! Best wishes for the contest. 7, Hugs, Sandra

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/18/2016 4:35:00 PM

Thank you for your support and comments, dear Sandra.. So happy you liked it!! :) :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/18/2016 3:05:00 PM

that is great how you did it on revolution. I got the sense it was about that as I read it, so you accomplished your goal. Sure to be a winner. wish I'd had time for this one.

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/18/2016 4:33:00 PM

Thank you, dear Andrea!! Glad you liked it.. would love tor read yours!! :) :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/18/2016 2:54:00 PM

- You are really skilled,Sneha - (A form I do not know, Burns Stanza ) - You describe the stom dramatically and well - I wish you good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/18/2016 4:29:00 PM

Oh, Thanks so much, dear Anne Lise!! :) :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/18/2016 2:09:00 PM

ohh, this is extraordinary, sneva... let me swoon!..huggs

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/18/2016 2:16:00 PM

Thanks a lot for your lovely comment, dear Nette.. Very glad you like it!! :) :)

Jan Allison

Date: 4/18/2016 2:04:00 PM

Sneha you do so much research to create your poems and to bring something totally unique in your work - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2016 2:20:00 PM

aww I'm a burns night baby and never celebrated in traditional style - i will do it one day and try haggis piped in by a piper in a kilt lol:-) hugs jan xx

Sneha Rv
Date: 4/18/2016 2:12:00 PM

Oh, Thank you so much, dear Jan!! I thought of this when I first saw the contest because I remembered one of Sydney's quotes from The Tale of Two Cities.. And I was thinking of you when I tried the Burns Stanza form; so glad you like it!! :) :)