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The Track of a Storm

A storm is brewing, slow, but strong
and those who do so many wrong
shall pay their price - and when the gong
does sound, they all shall fade.
And we shall axe, it shan't be long,
The palace's charade.*

On pompous thrones adorned with gold
they sit, so wrongly smug and bold.
They know no word for kind - So cold
and merciless their speech.
But soon their might as we foretold
cannot our purpose reach.

A storm is brewing, slow but sure -
Its last defeat shall be our cure.
Our tyrant's ways shall not recur -
our bolt will find its mark.
Their royal fate they shall incur...
   we'll watch the skies turn dark.


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From the POV of an oppressed citizen before the French Revolution 

- Title from The Tale of Two Cities.

* 'Charade' here (American) rhymes with fade.

Burns Stanza variation

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Ashok Kumar Mishra Date: 4/3/2018 11:53:00 PM well expressed! Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 6/18/2016 2:48:00 PM Congrats on your win..Sara Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 6/8/2016 5:35:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Sneha! Hugs Eve Login to Reply

Manmath Dalei Date: 5/3/2016 8:00:00 AM Sneha, Wonderful creation & nice concept. A 7 from me..........with love Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 5/3/2016 8:23:00 AM Thanks a lot; glad you like it!! :) :)

Paul Callus Date: 5/1/2016 7:53:00 AM You have done extremely well, Sneha. You recount the sentiments of the people that would eventually lead to the start of the revolution. I have never written this form...now you tempt me! ~ Regards // paul Login to Reply Ashok Kumar Mishra Date: 4/3/2018 11:51:00 PM nice example you have shared! thanks! Sneha Rv Date: 5/1/2016 8:26:00 AM Thank you so much for your lovely comment; so glad you like it!! The form is so interesting.. I found it on http://www.volecentral.co.uk/vf/burns.htm; the example is amazinG :) :)

Arthur Vaso Date: 5/1/2016 12:42:00 AM I am not sure you know, I love french history, many of my poems are based on France culture, I Loved this poem! :) Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 5/1/2016 8:27:00 AM Thank you so much! That's lovely.. I will surely visit your site! :) :)

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/18/2016 11:56:00 PM This is a awesome poem Sneha! Very moving. An inspiration from the Tale of Two Cities. This is sure to be in the top winners. I loved it! : ) Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 4/19/2016 8:19:00 AM Thank you so much, dear Connie!! So happy you like it!! :) :)

Sandra Haight Date: 4/18/2016 3:34:00 PM Such a great take on the theme, Sneha! Very powerful and nicely done! Best wishes for the contest. 7, Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 4/18/2016 4:35:00 PM Thank you for your support and comments, dear Sandra.. So happy you liked it!! :) :)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/18/2016 3:05:00 PM that is great how you did it on revolution. I got the sense it was about that as I read it, so you accomplished your goal. Sure to be a winner. wish I'd had time for this one. Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 4/18/2016 4:33:00 PM Thank you, dear Andrea!! Glad you liked it.. would love tor read yours!! :) :)

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/18/2016 2:54:00 PM - You are really skilled,Sneha - (A form I do not know, Burns Stanza ) - You describe the stom dramatically and well - I wish you good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 4/18/2016 4:29:00 PM Oh, Thanks so much, dear Anne Lise!! :) :)

Nette Onclaud Date: 4/18/2016 2:09:00 PM ohh, this is extraordinary, sneva... let me swoon!..huggs Login to Reply Sneha Rv Date: 4/18/2016 2:16:00 PM Thanks a lot for your lovely comment, dear Nette.. Very glad you like it!! :) :)

Jan Allison Date: 4/18/2016 2:04:00 PM Sneha you do so much research to create your poems and to bring something totally unique in your work - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/18/2016 2:20:00 PM aww I'm a burns night baby and never celebrated in traditional style - i will do it one day and try haggis piped in by a piper in a kilt lol:-) hugs jan xx Sneha Rv Date: 4/18/2016 2:12:00 PM Oh, Thank you so much, dear Jan!! I thought of this when I first saw the contest because I remembered one of Sydney's quotes from The Tale of Two Cities.. And I was thinking of you when I tried the Burns Stanza form; so glad you like it!! :) :)