Sara Kendrick Poet Diminished Hexaverse

The Top of the Family Tree

Top of the family tree
Looking down on young life
The future what is there?
A chance or more chances
To become more~improve
The deceased press down hard  

Train up the children
Teach the youth what's right
Show them correct way
Point them to the light
Through hands of love guide

The very top
Now there's freedom
No! Now first comes
Obligation

Tenderness
Gentleness
Listening

Ever
Love~Guide 

Now!

Finis'

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Lucilla Carrillo April 24, 2014 at 5:07 PM Sara; This is very well written. We should teach the children right. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Joe Maverick April 22, 2014 at 5:40 PM Well portrayed intentions Sara, such a lot of pitfalls out there, In my book kids lives and direction come 1st..' take care Joe))

Jack Horne April 21, 2014 at 4:36 PM yes, such words of wisdom here, Sara

Mark Peterson April 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM This is a form that is difficult to construct without sound contrived or forced. Good job. I'm not sure I'd even care to attempt it, so you'll get all my referrals.

Arthur Vaso April 19, 2014 at 11:57 PM I really enjoyed this creative write!

Andrea Dietrich April 19, 2014 at 9:17 PM Good one, Sara. NOW is what we should always be focused on. I know your love of family is strong!

Sandra Adams April 19, 2014 at 9:16 PM i have been trying to trace my family tree and have found relatives in italy on facebook now... love the way you did this poem Sara...interesting write :) Hugs

Richard Lamoureux April 19, 2014 at 6:04 PM I like it Sara!

Richard Lamoureux April 19, 2014 at 5:26 PM Interesting start, let me know when it is finished. I always think of the decendants as the roots of the tree that allow the children to branch out and reach to the sky. Sara Kendrick April 19, 2014 at 5:48 PM In some ways we might should think of it as the ancestors under the tree nourishing the it so that the tree can reach to the highest possible point..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Ken Carroll April 19, 2014 at 11:20 AM Some nice sentiments expressed here Sara..Happy Easter!

Brian Strand April 19, 2014 at 10:56 AM Thank you Sara for your recnt comment on my endeavours.rgds Brian

Sam Toil April 19, 2014 at 7:28 AM Beautiful Sara. The first five lines give so much hope. But then the last line -- a burden of a failed history? I think it reads well as it is. When you finish it, are you going to develop the last line? I can't wait to read your complete vision. Peace...Sam

Michael Wegman April 19, 2014 at 7:03 AM It read well from the start. I'm with Dave...looking forward tp the rest.