Goode Guy Poet Free verse

The Thing That Went

The thing that went...

The first thing that went wrong - 
was the buzzing in my left ear,
the one not buried in the pillow,
the one that was open to the world.

The second thing that went wrong
was that dream I was having,
you know, the one where I'm gazing
at you - soo beautiful, soo lustful,
was receding like a cosmic dust cloud

The third thing that went wrong
was my sense of consciousness coming 
before the fourth thing but after a second
I realized I was waking up to

The fourth thing that went wrong
the buzzing from the first was even 
louder now than a second ago and ticklish
and I realized it had - legs

The fifth thing that went wrong
was me turning and sitting erect quickly
not conscious enough to feel the rocking but
quite able to feel the ceiling I smashed into
a mere twenty-four inches above my bunk

The sixth thing that went wrong
was my abrupt shock from concussive smash
and my equal abhorrence at the knowledge
of something of the arthropod phylum
dancing upon my tympanic membrane

The seventh thing that went wrong
was me turning off the bunk to stand erect
forgetting I was on the top bunk
and my feet were far away from the floor

The eighth thing that went wrong
was the whitened pain that cross-eyed me 
as my right big toe curled 180°
underneath my gravitous torso pushing 
toward the planked floor below

The ninth thing that went wrong
was the piercing shout that came from
my wide involuntary lips and tongue
just as the Musca domestica miraculously
left my ear in a fit of self-preservation

The tenth thing that went wrong 
was the hard lateral left turn that I took 
just as the fly took a hard lateral right
and buzzed for final clearance to land
just below the epiglottis

The eleventh thing that went wrong
was me closing my mouth in utter surprise 
knowing the first thing that went right
was that domestic fly - right down my throat

"Good morning" you sleepily said as you 
blinked and smiled from your slumbering bunk
I looked at you with astonishment 
realizing I had started the day only
seconds ago, and already two things
had gone right; It was gonna be a good day.

© Goode Guy 2013-11-20

for the December 2013 challenge at the
open-mic at Aromas coffeehouse:
a first line of "The first thing that went wrong"

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