The Tear

"Sad Lady"

Like
one of
these tears that
freed itself from
my misted eyes, he's slipped away from me.
Oh, that once again he'd caress my face
like this tear which
warmly slides
down my
cheek.

"The Onlooking Man"

I 
watch you,
sad lady,
from my table
and see myself that tear that trails your skin.
While you think of someone else, I'm dying
to be that tear
that lingers
on your
mouth.

By Andrea Dietrich
For HGarvey Daniel Esquire's Contest:
"Personify a Tear"

(I was just told it should be 12 lines but the contest says to disavow 
what the blog says, so I hope it's ok to do this way with more than 12 lines!)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Horne Avatar
October 2, 2011 at 12:42 PM
This is your new oldest piece! I don't remember this one - don't think I've seen it before. Glad I read this sweet tender piece today : ) Ah, now, if I don't really have to eat the darn cereal - All bran - yummy! LOL
Rutherford Avatar
April 30, 2011 at 5:07 AM
Awesome poem Andrea, Thank you for visiting my page. Anne
Brown Avatar
April 26, 2011 at 4:27 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Andrea. I am sorry for the late comment but still having problems with the Soup since they worked on it. Love, Carol
Kendrick Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 4:49 PM
Congratulations on your win with this creative work...Sara
Guzzi Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 2:26 PM
Yes, I too tried to stay to 12 lines LOL [had to kinda cheat to do it ;)..long lines!] I really like this Andie and it IS personification which not many are doing! Nice win! particularly love part 2. Light & Love
Neels Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 12:17 PM
Congratulations Andrea on winning with this gem. I am doing good thanks, we have an extra long weekend over here.. Only going back to work on Thursday ;) how are you? Love Wilma
Freeman Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 11:57 AM
Great to see you in the winner's list, Andrea. Congratulations on your poem's success. Agape, Moses
Poet Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 10:52 AM
Congrats Andrea .That little gem of you.HG has ginen you $th placement--kash
Richards Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 7:41 AM
Love this one Andrea...you have the tear such heart! Congratulations on your win!!
Winter Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 6:15 AM
Congrats to you Andrea on this beautiful winning poem with such moving and deeply felt imagery. Thanks so very much for your thoughtful and kind congrats on my poem, it is so sincerely appreciated. Love, shar
Sweetheart Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 4:25 AM
Congrats Andrea my friend on another wonderful win in HG's contest on tears.. lovely expressions of emotion ..freed from my misted eyes..wow.. u always wow me luv..enjoy another top spot...
Mehta Avatar
April 22, 2011 at 4:24 AM
Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest, Andrea
Johnson Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 9:36 PM
Congratulations on this one act play with your poem and your win. Love, Joyce
Esquire Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 9:36 PM
Dear Andrea, Thank-YOU for Supporting My Contest " Personify A Tear " Congratulations on YOUR $th Place Win LOVE ALWAYS, YOUR Liege...Harry ( HG )
K. Avatar
April 8, 2011 at 12:40 AM
thank you for your wonderful comments on my beseech poem, Andrea-- you are right, once you get the hang of it, it's actually pretty fun to write! I had a blast writing that one & you're encouraging me to try out these "forms"-- thank you sweetie :)
K. Avatar
April 7, 2011 at 7:31 AM
that's ok :) you can go to my poem when you are more free-- btw re-sent you the link :) hugs
Reid-Hansen Avatar
April 7, 2011 at 1:42 AM
Stopping by for a good read! Nice work=0)
K. Avatar
April 5, 2011 at 10:47 PM
back here-- thank you so much for dropping by my poem-I will try to work on it and your critique was more than welcome, sweetie! I have a story for it but I lost that train of thought so hopefully I can pull it off-- see you around and happy TV watching :) hugs to you :)
Culverhouse Avatar
April 5, 2011 at 6:40 AM
very well penned....greatness has graspeed your pen and awed my mind today. Thanks for sharing your wonders with us poet want to bes. smiles.
Esquire Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 6:04 PM
Dear Andrea, Thank-YOU for Supporting my Contest " Personify a Tear " Yes there is no Length Limit I wrote the Contest Rules one day and the Blog the next when I had no Entrees when I finished the Blog I had 16 Entrees 11 which were more than 12 Lines and Superbly Written I can not in good conscience not accept such Heartfelt POETIC Art YOU know YOU make Judging Very hard YOUR Liege ALWAYS, LOVE...HG ( Harry )
Buckeridge Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 1:58 PM
Great write. Liked this poem. I enjoy trying to write different forms of poetry. By the way Cheyps is a mix of my friends nickname and mine! X
Neels Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 1:03 PM
Awesome comes to mind Andrea, absolutely love this.. Good luck to you with this gem, loved your approach.. love wilma
Aul Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 10:04 AM
It is a great write with wishful thinking we all have done at one time or another.....George
Onclaud Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 11:47 PM
oh wowowow! my girl... please remind me first if you're posting a poem lest i get floored again... fantastic... this is my 7 for the tourney!! :) huggs, nette... how's the wedding? come back here, soon i hope but enjoy!
K. Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 11:25 PM
I can so relate to you about the laptop non-mouse thingy (haha what do you call that anyway??) --me too I hate that & it's even so sensitive, my cursor goes everywhere when I use it! BUt I am so happy it allows you to be here though ;) & thank you for your sweet comments-- haha as usual I closed the contest, lol ;) enjoy the rest of your evening-- and have fun tomorrow! hugs to you :)
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