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The Tear

"Sad Lady"

Like
one of
these tears that
freed itself from
my misted eyes, he's slipped away from me.
Oh, that once again he'd caress my face
like this tear which
warmly slides
down my
cheek.

"The Onlooking Man"

I 
watch you,
sad lady,
from my table
and see myself that tear that trails your skin.
While you think of someone else, I'm dying
to be that tear
that lingers
on your
mouth.

By Andrea Dietrich
For HGarvey Daniel Esquire's Contest:
"Personify a Tear"

(I was just told it should be 12 lines but the contest says to disavow 
what the blog says, so I hope it's ok to do this way with more than 12 lines!)



















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Date: 10/2/2011 12:42:00 PM
This is your new oldest piece! I don't remember this one - don't think I've seen it before. Glad I read this sweet tender piece today : ) Ah, now, if I don't really have to eat the darn cereal - All bran - yummy! LOL
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Date: 4/30/2011 5:07:00 AM
Awesome poem Andrea, Thank you for visiting my page. Anne
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Date: 4/26/2011 4:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Andrea. I am sorry for the late comment but still having problems with the Soup since they worked on it. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/22/2011 4:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this creative work...Sara
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Date: 4/22/2011 2:26:00 PM
Yes, I too tried to stay to 12 lines LOL [had to kinda cheat to do it ;)..long lines!] I really like this Andie and it IS personification which not many are doing! Nice win! particularly love part 2. Light & Love
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Date: 4/22/2011 12:17:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea on winning with this gem. I am doing good thanks, we have an extra long weekend over here.. Only going back to work on Thursday ;) how are you? Love Wilma
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Date: 4/22/2011 11:57:00 AM
Great to see you in the winner's list, Andrea. Congratulations on your poem's success. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/22/2011 10:52:00 AM
Congrats Andrea .That little gem of you.HG has ginen you $th placement--kash
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Date: 4/22/2011 7:41:00 AM
Love this one Andrea...you have the tear such heart! Congratulations on your win!!
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Date: 4/22/2011 6:15:00 AM
Congrats to you Andrea on this beautiful winning poem with such moving and deeply felt imagery. Thanks so very much for your thoughtful and kind congrats on my poem, it is so sincerely appreciated. Love, shar
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Date: 4/22/2011 4:25:00 AM
Congrats Andrea my friend on another wonderful win in HG's contest on tears.. lovely expressions of emotion ..freed from my misted eyes..wow.. u always wow me luv..enjoy another top spot...
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Date: 4/22/2011 4:24:00 AM
Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest, Andrea
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Date: 4/21/2011 9:36:00 PM
Dear Andrea, Thank-YOU for Supporting My Contest " Personify A Tear " Congratulations on YOUR $th Place Win LOVE ALWAYS, YOUR Liege...Harry ( HG )
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Date: 4/21/2011 9:36:00 PM
Congratulations on this one act play with your poem and your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/8/2011 12:40:00 AM
thank you for your wonderful comments on my beseech poem, Andrea-- you are right, once you get the hang of it, it's actually pretty fun to write! I had a blast writing that one & you're encouraging me to try out these "forms"-- thank you sweetie :)
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Date: 4/7/2011 7:31:00 AM
that's ok :) you can go to my poem when you are more free-- btw re-sent you the link :) hugs
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Date: 4/7/2011 1:42:00 AM
Stopping by for a good read! Nice work=0)
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Date: 4/5/2011 10:47:00 PM
back here-- thank you so much for dropping by my poem-I will try to work on it and your critique was more than welcome, sweetie! I have a story for it but I lost that train of thought so hopefully I can pull it off-- see you around and happy TV watching :) hugs to you :)
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Date: 4/5/2011 6:40:00 AM
very well penned....greatness has graspeed your pen and awed my mind today. Thanks for sharing your wonders with us poet want to bes. smiles.
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Date: 4/2/2011 6:04:00 PM
Dear Andrea, Thank-YOU for Supporting my Contest " Personify a Tear " Yes there is no Length Limit I wrote the Contest Rules one day and the Blog the next when I had no Entrees when I finished the Blog I had 16 Entrees 11 which were more than 12 Lines and Superbly Written I can not in good conscience not accept such Heartfelt POETIC Art YOU know YOU make Judging Very hard YOUR Liege ALWAYS, LOVE...HG ( Harry )
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:58:00 PM
Great write. Liked this poem. I enjoy trying to write different forms of poetry. By the way Cheyps is a mix of my friends nickname and mine! X
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:03:00 PM
Awesome comes to mind Andrea, absolutely love this.. Good luck to you with this gem, loved your approach.. love wilma
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Date: 4/2/2011 10:04:00 AM
It is a great write with wishful thinking we all have done at one time or another.....George
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Date: 4/1/2011 11:47:00 PM
oh wowowow! my girl... please remind me first if you're posting a poem lest i get floored again... fantastic... this is my 7 for the tourney!! :) huggs, nette... how's the wedding? come back here, soon i hope but enjoy!
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Date: 4/1/2011 11:25:00 PM
I can so relate to you about the laptop non-mouse thingy (haha what do you call that anyway??) --me too I hate that & it's even so sensitive, my cursor goes everywhere when I use it! BUt I am so happy it allows you to be here though ;) & thank you for your sweet comments-- haha as usual I closed the contest, lol ;) enjoy the rest of your evening-- and have fun tomorrow! hugs to you :)
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