The Teach's From Brookl'N / Dedicated Ta Sweetheart

T hey’d aughta not called nookie
H eaven’s blessed cookie...
E ither burd or bee, cause neither's a lookie! 

B urds well der feathered, not like me?
I n da interest of clarity, I’m certainly NO bee?
R obins do have red breasts and I have two, see?
D ern, maybe dat's why dey calls dem da burds and da bees?
S o, if da ladies da burd, da guy must be da bee? 

A nyway, why didn’t dey call IT da cows and da doves?
N ow, cows at least got legs and doves are for luv!
D rat, I still don’t get da bee stingy thingie, "Gov?"

T he bees has a sting YIKE and bees sure love honey.
H ell, maybe they thought a man'd sting ya for money?
E ither dat or “Hmmm,” some ladies are real punny?

B et we women smell real sweet, I guess, and da bees fly to honey?
E eeeeeekkk, I so confuddled, I feel like Mikey Rooney? 
E ach dern metaphors is making me more looney tooney!
S imply forget da dern foolishness and give me a groomie!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/10/2010 7:03:00 PM
Deb, this is the first one that was REALLY super interesting to me, very fun to read!! wish I had thought of this idea! (and obviously the male has the stinger, so . .. ... ) And birds are just dang sweet! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 8/10/2010 2:29:00 PM
brilliant acrostic. the words that you used, "dey" and "da" for example, put me in the mindset of one of my favorite poets Langston Hughes. enjoyed the read. thank you for sharing this one with us.
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Date: 8/10/2010 2:26:00 PM
Per your last comment, I haven't a clue. Except that I have seen no rules on limericks that require iambic pentameter, if that's what you're saying.
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Date: 8/10/2010 2:03:00 PM
I got your Soup mail. Tel me if you want me to pull my bikini poem out of the contest. Can't write about "monsters" right now -- sent you a soup mail.
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Date: 8/10/2010 9:50:00 AM
Deborah, I entered your contest but don't know where to find your "Sestina's" section to register per the instructions on your contest. Can you tell me where to sign up for Itsy Bitsy, Teenie Weenie, Yellow Polka-Dog Bikini? Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/9/2010 8:16:00 PM
I always enjoye the lingo in your write. Takes much time to understand, though. But I enjoy it. Good luck, Debie
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Date: 8/9/2010 8:07:00 PM
SUPERKALAFRAGALISTICEXPIALIDOTIOUS!!! omg this is absolutely creative and inventive ..awesome and energetic with the play on words... u not only get a gold star ..u get all the stars for this one TEACH.. appreciate the props here with the title.. and the groomie... zoomie.. good luck in Carol's contest..pupil.. in awe.. awestruck..luv..
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Date: 8/9/2010 6:52:00 PM
Ah, this is great, love the thought process and the dialect, very well done! Best wishes in the contest! Kris
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Date: 8/9/2010 6:17:00 PM
CUTE ONE DEB. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST.XOXOX Dane (soupmail, soon.)
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Date: 8/9/2010 4:58:00 PM
Funny acrostic, Deborah! Surely some ladies have had men sting them for money. You had me laughing out loud. Love, Carolyn
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