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When You Are Old poetry contest Sponsored by Sara Kendrick "When You Are Old" by WB Yeats
Peer at your reflection, see with their eyes, the bloom of roses in soft, downy cheek. Rigid, cold looking glass, no warmth to seek. All life must wither and the moon must rise. Each believes they hold to the pastel posy. Change begins with frigid wind of slate gray. Turn then, to me, see your soul's eternal day. I, blind to time see you forever rosy. In beauty you bask in each longing look. Though your surrounded, each eye is your own. Clouds of admiration but ever alone. When night falls, I'll be the sun you forsook.

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Date: 1/21/2025 11:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in my contest. Way to go. Thank you for your participation. Sara K
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Crystol Woods
Date: 1/21/2025 1:36:00 PM
Thank you for a wonderful contest and poetry prompt! Xo
Date: 1/21/2025 8:09:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your write with a great ending again.... Have a blessed day with your win as you write away..................
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Crystol Woods
Date: 1/21/2025 1:35:00 PM
Thanks Paula! You as well! Xo
Date: 1/17/2025 11:28:00 AM
Excellent rhymes Crystol none felt forced. Awesome take on the contest theme. One day - eternal beauty for the chosen
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Crystol Woods
Date: 1/18/2025 4:10:00 AM
Amen! Thanks so much Tom.xo
Date: 1/17/2025 11:16:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your write with a great ending. "Good Luck" We both did one... Have a fun day as you write away..................
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Crystol Woods
Date: 1/18/2025 4:11:00 AM
Ty! Xo

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