Laura Breidenthal Poet Free verse

The Stars Tonight Are Scarce

The stars tonight are scarce
But hell, every night they are scarce
A city dweller longs crisp air
But is forced to breathe in what is there
It’s a shame really
To be somewhere you don’t want to be…
But hey, no one’s forcing me to stay here
See, other elements are at play
I believe more and more everyday
That we are in the way of ourselves
Our thoughts torment and jeer
Though often we sugar-coat ourselves with cheer

In a way, the stars tonight are scarce
Because of me

They don’t have to be scarce
They could be multitudninous
If only this half-hearted mind was free
Man, for once
I should really consider not being me!

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James Marshall Goff May 14, 2014 at 8:48 PM I see much anticipation in this verse! I believe you are on the threshold of sumthin' cool? jimbo

Kathryn Collins December 3, 2013 at 7:06 AM Who else would you be? the stars tonight are scarce Because of me what a line dear Laura. We are responsible, yes? love, Kathy

Jay Loveless October 31, 2013 at 8:40 AM I really like this, sorry that you cant enjoy the stars from your location though, I live out near the country, their one of my favorite things <3

Matthew Anish September 15, 2013 at 7:17 PM Your poem reminds me of a Woody Allan quote to the effect that "my biggest wish is that I was someone else". Looks like we are stuck with ourselves. The stars are still out there although they are hard to see from urban locations. Keep the faith! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jiril Clemons September 15, 2013 at 1:02 PM Deep poem, Laura. Enjoyable overall in its expression. Check out some of mine, might find some you like. Peace.

Anne-Lise Andresen September 10, 2013 at 2:45 AM - Laura, this is deep from the soul .... you are skilled - beautiful girl should not have such thoughts ... sun, rain, wind, stars ... embrace life! - Wish you all the best! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Liam Mcdaid September 9, 2013 at 2:26 PM HEARTFELT BEAUTIFUL A PETAL FROM THE RED ROSE

Stephen Kilmer September 9, 2013 at 11:49 AM We build the walls around ourself and often hold the key but never open the door. This is a truly touching and sincere piece. To see the stars in the desert without a light around is amazing. It's funny what you can see when not blinded by the light of society. Cheers ~Kilmer

Nette Onclaud September 9, 2013 at 11:32 AM what a sincere way at loking into the slef, laura.. the stars are ot dcarce; sometime, it's our perspective that is so... beautifully written from the heart!..:) huggs

Jack Ellison September 9, 2013 at 10:53 AM Happy to have you around again, my dear Laura! You were one of the first to make me feel at home when I first joined! Love you for that... big hugs, Jack xoxox

Poet Tacito September 9, 2013 at 8:11 AM I understand the feelings here. Craving for an escape and just embrace a wild & free set of winds. We are our worst enemy, if we allow ourselves to bed with fear every night. Fear embeds us when we start to think for ourselves. We do have the power of choice to make it right. Our choices make who we are. An excellent reflection here!

Painted Hunter September 9, 2013 at 6:35 AM Hey Laura...how are ya gal? I've never lived in the city. The stars are always out in Nowhere. Of course, I know you aren't just talking about THOSE kind of stars only...are you? You ARE a star, even though you don't know it yet....you will. I can see you shining right now.

Poet Destroyer A September 9, 2013 at 5:52 AM hi Laura, im a sad person I'm very bitter to know how scarce or deep the night is, the thing is the night is beauty even when only a few stars shine down. I never care to look up and see the beauty of the night. I'm afraid I won't see a single star, just cuz it's me looking up. a deep write. ..thanks for the awesome comment. .luv..linda