Justin Bordner Poet Epic

The Sprigs and Spirit of Sistine -2

I'm known as the serpent
but I have a name wise and wonderful too,
I loved Adam well before Eve came into being
I remember how his first sunset scared him
I ate grapes with him as roses bloomed at dawn,
watching them hold hands hurts me,
seeing them kiss with fervor
makes me sick with seething sorrow,
look at her shy stupidity
how eager she is for his arms,
she's so voluptuous and smooth,
no, I won't let this excuse for love go on,

Hello Eve, it's nice to see you happy,
how is Adam staying busy...
Oh, Adam is searching for a gift to give me,
he calls it a jewel, says it glimmers like a star...
Hmmmm, he always knew how to find the neatest things...
We feel so safe and strong together...
That's great Eve, tell me,
what's your favorite food here, in this garden...
Oh, the pears are heaven...
Have you ever tried the apple...
Well no, Father said no way,
Adam and I mustn't eat of it,
the apple could get us into trouble, serious trouble...
Why...
Father isn't always clear,
but He said something about good and evil,
innocence and suffering, I don't know,
it doesn't matter, we would never disobey Father...
Oh, I understand, He's waiting until you and Adam
become smarter, more mature, then He'll share...
Geeee, maybe...
Well what happens 
when you eat the other fruits of divine creation...
It's incredible, a rush of joy
jumps into my mind,
I feel electric...
The apple is no different, well, except the ecstasy...
What's ecstasy...
Imagine becoming a glorious star
high and heroic, super smart
just for a few moments, 
your Father would never even know...

J.A.B.

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Ink Empress July 20, 2026 at 2:22 PM You know how to deliver exactly what you have in mind ~ what you feel and what you know! And I didn’t want this to end! I’m just glad it isn’t the end. ;) “What’s ecstasy… Imagine becoming a glorious star, high and heroic, super smart, just for a few moments.” What even?! Who describes ecstasy like that? Only you, Justin Bordner! You are just so incredibly deep. I can’t believe this was posted in 2017! Your creative intelligence has been alive and shining for such a long time! Love the language

Ink Empress July 20, 2026 at 2:18 PM "We feel so safe and strong together..."! Hmm it sounds like divine love!! The kind of love I feel so deeply too! To feel safe, in someones arms, heart, soul, essence , spirit, is a beautiful rare thing my dear Poet man! You impress me with the way youv painted imagery! It evokes so many emotions ~ only a master writer could do that! I notice also your creative word pairings! The way youv used here oxymorons, alliterations, and also how you awaken senses of readers through words, shows that ~

Alesia Leach May 18, 2025 at 1:20 PM Justin, the voice of the serpent here is chillingly intimate--smooth, persuasive, and heartbreakingly jealous. You’ve humanized temptation with such rich emotion and cunning logic. “I remember how his first sunset scared him” is an absolutely brilliant line--so tender, so foreboding. This is Eden reimagined with complexity and fire. Justin Bordner May 18, 2025 at 5:52 PM I'm made so happy by the depth of your feelings, and that this composition serves the hunger of your intellect sumptuously Poetess...J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal September 7, 2017 at 10:03 PM Taking in your words this evening is bringing me great joy, Justin! I love this arrant and sassy segment of the series. Yes, the serpent is wise and wonderful. Very interesting, the jealousy he expresses in the first stanza. What can I say, apples will always be my favorite fruit. Cheers Justin! I'll be back for more. Always, Laura Justin Bordner September 9, 2017 at 1:46 PM I had a unique vision of not just coexitence, but also a sentimental history between the Serpent and Adam. The Serpent had a love for Adam, and Eve was seen as an unbearable interloper. The Serpent's cunning is absolutely chilling in motivation, and execution. The juxtaposition of Eve's naivety and the Serpent's wicked jealousy is palpable, the consequence, lamentable Laura...J.A.B.