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The Spider

Hello little fella! hanging down from the roof Idolizing brave knights quite similar your spoof Oh going to weave again? Or it's just for fun? Little feet you have, working under the bright sun Running back and forth, driving professionally The transparent lines made by your work patiently Finishing your web to become firm like a wall Though many times to encounter error and fall The center point of abode certainly transform Quirky wall especially in night ready to form Calling the attention of your favorite meal Uncomfortable gun target the prey to kill Your strange beauty tailoring your suitors to loom An angelic quietness of yours preparing their tomb The pure work, modest tricks obtain your victory But move amiss, foes eat you complimentary Working hard endlessly can't stop the wind and rain Your brave spirit and entire strength ignore the pain The Spider by Elai Cee for "Along Came a Spider Entry Poetry Contest" under by Suzanne Delaney

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Date: 6/29/2013 10:14:00 PM
Elai, lovely couplet, I love how it dances along, congratulations on your win.
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Elai Cee
Date: 7/1/2013 5:41:00 AM
thank you Sheri, happy to see u here!
Date: 6/23/2013 4:48:00 AM
This is one reason I didn't enter this contest. Anything I could offer is far outclassed by your fine work... I live to compete another day... Congratulations .... Jake
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/23/2013 7:29:00 AM
Hey Jake thank you, for me ur one of my favorite poets here!
Date: 6/21/2013 8:00:00 AM
Thank you so much! God bless!
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Date: 6/20/2013 4:32:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in this fun contest. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/20/2013 7:29:00 AM
Great congrats on your superb win, my friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 6/6/2013 6:14:00 AM
There are many messages in the Spider. I thoroughly enjoyed and appreciated it. I could have re-arranged it so it would appear more like a couplet. I just happened to copy it that way.
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/6/2013 7:26:00 AM
thanks for the visit! yah, definitely ur poem(couplet) becomes amazing! God bless u!
Date: 6/3/2013 7:31:00 AM
Very well done, should do well.
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/3/2013 9:13:00 AM
thank you Richard
Date: 6/3/2013 7:25:00 AM
Perfect! As Steven Tyler says, "I don't want to miss a thing" Love it http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Dmf76hEYud4
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/3/2013 10:10:00 AM
hahaha!
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/3/2013 9:17:00 AM
miss u Judy. thanks
Date: 6/3/2013 2:35:00 AM
Nice poem Elai. Minsan ka nlg magsulat ah. Lols. Kelangan ko na nga sigurong kumuha ng mga tula sa FB ko. minsan wala nakong idea na susulatin eh. hahahah. (/>_<)/ _|__|_
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Nato Calubiran
Date: 6/3/2013 8:43:00 PM
17 pa ta pasok namen eh. busy sa OJT ngaun, kaya e2 PoetrySoup paminsan2
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/3/2013 5:56:00 AM
hehehe oo nga eh busy nah my pasok na school...
Date: 6/1/2013 4:24:00 PM
Beautifully written and expertly crafted. Loving this poem. "Your strange beauty tailoring your suitors to loom An angelic quietness of yours preparing their tomb" Loving these lines
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 7:07:00 PM
thank you Funom.
Date: 6/1/2013 10:07:00 AM
- A good poem Elai!. - Luck in contest. - Have a beautiful weekend! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 7:07:00 PM
thanks Anne. miss ur sweet comment.
Date: 6/1/2013 7:45:00 AM
I would change that very last line to: "By your brave spirit and entire strength, ignore the pain". This was a very enjoyable piece, nonetheless. :)
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 8:32:00 AM
yah gets! thanks Drake! big hug and this mhuah!
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 8:30:00 AM
i don't get do i need to change it?
Date: 6/1/2013 5:21:00 AM
A lovely web you have woven around the spider,good luck in the contest, thanks for stopping by with your sweet comments!!
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Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 5:33:00 AM
thanks SJ. yeah good luck to me!

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