Kp Nunez Poet Terzanelle

The Song of Wisdom

Upon the wind I hear her whispered song
she says “Come to me” with such urgency
I listen now as I’ve been all lifelong.

I turn to look, straining my eyes to see
just like a child who knows his mother’s voice
she says “Come to me” with such urgency.

This Lady who is not everyone’s choice
I follow her and choose the road she’s kept
just like a child who knows his mother’s voice.

For those who left her have bitterly wept
with Wisdom I will daily walk in faith
I follow her and choose the road she’s kept.

In quiet times the small voice I await
I will be strong, mild, teachable and kind
with Wisdom I will daily walk in faith.

I’ll heed her call, that I don’t walk like blind
for in the wind I hear her whispered song
I will be strong, mild, teachable and kind
and listen now as I’ve been all lifelong.




*small voice- rhema    

22 June 2015
Villanelles and Terzanelles Only Contest -4th Place
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton

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John Lawless June 28, 2015 at 7:06 AM Kim, it has been said that "youth is wasted on the young". Good luck with your shift in consciousness regarding your writing.

Lindsay Laurie June 27, 2015 at 12:45 AM Hello Kim... your poem is full of wisdom and a worthy winner - congratulations - Lindsay

Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2015 at 8:08 AM I see congratulations are in order. I'm pleased you are on the winners list. You are an excellent poet.

Debbie Guzzi June 24, 2015 at 10:16 PM A mother's voice her lessons are the first ones all children learn from, and the earth is the womb of all things. All life has gestated within, upon and beneath the earth. Earth Mother & Sky Father bless you - Light & Love

Emile Pinet June 24, 2015 at 6:17 PM This piece stands as a pointer to all who read it that wisdom is the goddess of knowledge and a guide on the road to contentment. Emile.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders June 24, 2015 at 11:31 AM Beautiful and inspiring words, Kim! Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda

Carol Eastman June 24, 2015 at 9:46 AM A wonderfully, enjoyable piece. And some one I wish my sons had listened to more often as they grew up.

Shadow Hamilton June 24, 2015 at 9:29 AM it gives me pleasure to see you on winners list Kim congrats hugs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 24, 2015 at 3:25 AM Galing Kim!I never tried this form... but wow you did it excellent!!~Olive Eloisa

Paul Callus June 23, 2015 at 3:46 PM An inspired poem, Kim! Your handling of this form is laudable. I used Villanelle for my entry, and admit that I have never tried a Terzanelle...you beat me to it!:) In my eyes, this is a sure winner. hugs // paul Kp Nunez June 24, 2015 at 9:55 AM Oh, but I did win after all, Paul. I sent a soupie to Shadow to clarify the reason why I didn't win, just so I'd know what to do next time... it appears there was some mistake. Why don't you verify? Paul Callus June 24, 2015 at 6:49 AM Sorry about that, Kim. We all judge differently!! If it's any comfort to you, neither did mine!:))

Gary Bateman June 23, 2015 at 2:47 PM Hello Kim!! Your Terzanelle here is quiet excellent in every respect. I wish you all the best for the contest. I would think here that your entry should be very competitive, if not the winner. I've done a Villanelle in the past and plan to do some more here soon, but I've not yet attempted the Terzanelle although I am aware of its flow and schema. Beyond the format aspects, the subject and theme of your Terzanelle with "The Song of Wisdom" is very compelling!! A "7" + FAV!! Best Always, Gary Gary Bateman June 25, 2015 at 2:44 PM I'm glad to see that your Terzanelle did win after all Kim!! You certainly deserve it -- and the beauty and quality of your write shines through in every respect. (And although, I was not the sponsor of this contest, I wanted to let you know that your write was and is certainly in line with my own professional high standard for publication!!) Way To Go!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary

Scott Thirtyseven June 23, 2015 at 2:07 PM Well structured poem, a joy to read. Best of luck in the comp.

David Meade June 23, 2015 at 12:55 PM I call you Wind Listener - for it is upon the winds that mysteries are revealed . . . lovely my dear. 7

Milton Robertson June 23, 2015 at 7:17 AM A very wise choice. An excellent write. Keep the Blessing coming.

Viv Wigley June 23, 2015 at 7:07 AM A seven isn't good enough, Kim. I'll have to award you an eleventeen. Should something inspire me to attempt a Terzanelle, I shall consider it, but you write as effortlessly as you breathe. Lovely write, and I shall keep it as a fave. Viv x

Andrea Dietrich June 23, 2015 at 12:17 AM wow, this is really nice! So full of thoughtfulness and sincerity. To me it seemed like someone following their mother. Whether spiritual mother or maternal, for the very best reasons to follow her. HOpe this does well in the contest

Afolabi Muideen June 22, 2015 at 10:54 PM Beautiful, beautiful I like this write you penned well and heart lifted........A.M.

David Brown June 22, 2015 at 8:22 PM Lovely work, Kim such a sense of commitment and fulfillment. Beautiful

Pandita Sietesantos June 22, 2015 at 8:05 PM Kim, this is such a beautiful, inspirational Terzanella! Thanks for sharing the wisdom in such a wonderful way! Pandita

Tim Smith June 22, 2015 at 7:48 PM Indeed a tremendous Terzanella...It flows so well....Tim

Alexis Y. June 22, 2015 at 7:21 PM Kim, this is indeed a beautiful song. I hear wisdom , faith and someone willing to learn. This piece has a skillful melody. Excellent job. 7+:) Alexis

Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2015 at 2:42 PM This is quite beautiful! 7 my dear.

Nette Onclaud June 22, 2015 at 1:45 PM now this is what i was talking about, kim... shining, focused verse that ends with a great punch.... whoot!.. love it!.. huggs

Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2015 at 9:46 AM Reverse your first and third lines in stanzas two to stanza five. Replace lines two and four in the last stanza with lines one and two from stanza one and it will be perfect. Kp Nunez June 22, 2015 at 12:37 PM I have now edited the poem, Rick. Thanks again.

Anne-Lise Andresen June 22, 2015 at 6:30 AM - You are wise, loving, willing to learn, strong! - Yes, enjoy life's journey, every step !!! - A really beautiful poem dear friend Kim (7+) - I believe that this will top the winner list, good luck! - Thank you for the nice visit + fav. on our last co write, really a pleasure and honor! - I wish you a lovely new week - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)