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The Smile You Share

The smile you share This morning so fair, I face unaware, its cool flowing air or soft sunrise glare, bright tangerine flair, I’ve nary a care As since you are there, I can’t help but stare your beauty I swear, answered my prayer, for the smile you share, nothing can compare 1/5/17 Written for the Rhymers delight- internal monorhyme Poetry Contest Sponsored by John Hamilton I used the syllable counter and have 10 per line, apparently it is counting “prayer” as two syllables.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/17/2017 9:01:00 PM

I'm glad this one won. I can't believe I had not faved you as a poet yet. So now I have you followed!!!

Chris Green
Date: 1/18/2017 8:13:00 AM

Thank you so very much Andrea

Darren White

Date: 1/15/2017 10:11:00 AM

See? I was right, the jury was knocked over ;) Congratulations!

Chris Green
Date: 1/16/2017 8:34:00 AM

Yes you were my friend. :) Thanks so much Darren.

Mark Martin

Date: 1/12/2017 3:25:00 PM

I guess the syllable counter thinks a pray-er is someone who prays - which is two syllables. Good that you checked this manually! Congrats on your win Chris! :-)

Chris Green
Date: 1/12/2017 3:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Mark, I figured better safe than sorry. :) I'm thrilled you liked this one.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/11/2017 3:22:00 AM

Congratulations on your win with this fine poem, Chris. :) Hugs, Dane Ann

Chris Green
Date: 1/11/2017 8:00:00 AM

Thanks so very much Dane Ann

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/10/2017 7:03:00 PM

A great poem with internal/ending Monorhymes, Chris! Congratulations on your fine Podium win. Sandra

Chris Green
Date: 1/11/2017 8:00:00 AM

Thank you so much Sandra.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/10/2017 3:13:00 PM

Back with congratulations, Chris...well done!! // paul

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2017 3:15:00 PM

Thanks so very much Paul.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/10/2017 5:27:00 AM

A lovely monorhyme with excellent flow, Chris:) congratulations:)

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2017 8:42:00 AM

Thanks so very much Jo. I appreciate your kind words.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/9/2017 10:42:00 PM

Beautifully crafted. Congratulations!

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2017 8:41:00 AM

Thank you so very much.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/9/2017 8:32:00 PM

Beautiful flow Chris, congrats on a fine win!

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2017 8:41:00 AM

Thanks so very much John. I enjoyed writing this for your contest.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/7/2017 7:11:00 AM

Well done, Chris! That wide smile is contagious:) I think judges should give the benefit of the doubt where syllable counts are debatable. Your 'prayer' would have sounded better were it to be read as one syllable. ~ Regards // paul

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2017 8:34:00 AM

Thanks so very much Paul. I am considering changing it.

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/6/2017 10:56:00 PM

Really nice, Chris. You always carry such an excellent flow:)

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2017 8:34:00 AM

Thanks so very much Daniel. I appreciate your kind thoughts.

Doug Vinson

Date: 1/6/2017 5:43:00 PM

Sometimes have to laugh at the syllable counter on PoetrySoup. How many syllables in "prayer touch ruse"? Apparently the answer is 6! : P Wicked good job, Chris. : ) (May have to brew up some strong tea myself and take a crack at this contest. But wow, one has to find a big group of words with the same ending sounds, to begin with...)

Doug Vinson
Date: 1/6/2017 11:04:00 PM

And I would go ahead and make it "has answered my prayers."

Doug Vinson
Date: 1/6/2017 10:36:00 PM

"Walked" also has two syllables, apparently. :p I even tried "waiked" in case there was some weirdness with the "L" and the "I" but it only showed one syllable for "waiked." It's funny - for "how many syllables are in 'walked," it shows "2." Then below, it gives a list of "Words that rhyme with walked and also have One Syllable." The last one mentioned is "walked." Gremlins, Ghost in the Machine.

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 5:46:00 PM

Yeah, I know what you mean but I wasn't sure what or who would determine the syllable count, since the rule require 10 per line. I had that line written as " has answered my prayers", but, I was outnumbered. ;) Thanks so much my friend.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/6/2017 5:28:00 PM

I love the "morning so fair" and "beauty I swear" - they compliment each other nicely! Good luck on the contest! (Those syllables can be very tricky!

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 5:33:00 PM

Thank you, this was a tough one for me to write and yes those syllables can be very tricky. :)

Jan Allison

Date: 1/6/2017 2:39:00 PM

Your delightful rhyme made me smile Chris :-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 3:48:00 PM

Then it did its job Jan. : ) Thank you so much.

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/6/2017 12:02:00 PM

Hi Chris, This is a good write for the contest theme. A smile is a beautiful thing. It can do wonders. Great job. You inspired me to give it a try. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 12:41:00 PM

That's great, I can't wait to see what you write my friend. Thank you so much.

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/6/2017 11:25:00 AM

GREAT VERSES GALORE! Your ship fired all cannons my friend! Delightful verses and superb flow.. Super 10...

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 12:40:00 PM

Thanks Robert once again for being so kind to me.

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/6/2017 11:25:00 AM

OPPS , FORGOT THE 7 ... MY BAD..LOL

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/6/2017 10:54:00 AM

The smile says so much about the person..The smile and the eyes..Cute poem : ).

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 12:40:00 PM

Thank you Charmaine, so very much.

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/6/2017 10:17:00 AM

Perfect Chris! So nice :) Good luck in the contest!

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 12:37:00 PM

Thanks so very much Heidi, I appreciate you stopping by this morning

Darren White

Date: 1/6/2017 10:09:00 AM

You rock me from my socks..//.. if that one doesn't knock the jury over, I'll turn into a frog... You so nailed this, and not that alone, it's beautiful too, your favourite tangerine is in there even....and I am in awe, fave absolutely.

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 12:37:00 PM

Thank you Darren for this totally encouraging and uplifting comment on my poem. I am really happy you enjoyed it.

Akkina Downing

Date: 1/6/2017 9:05:00 AM

How sweet this is... Lovely to the heart. Good luck Chris, all the best :)

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2017 9:49:00 AM

Thank you so very much Akkina