Red Fiery Poet Free verse

The Sky

THE SKY 


Oh! Sky the lonely heart
Dwelling upon my untiring soul
Lost with an unspoken word.
Fountain of misery teaches him
That defiant endurance…
Oh! Sky the lonely soul
The creatures fly and obey
But the hollowness prevails.
The Sun burns him with anguish
Yet he weeps with pride.
Oh! Sky my undeniable hero
You made me the undefeated queen,
But I remained lost in my thoughts of isolation!
Now I wish to merge in you
Come my hero …my sky!

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Poet Destroyer A April 19, 2016 at 5:53 AM Your hero is divine Red, I love the merging of your soul. Laying to rest in the peaceful sky. Your quest is sentimental. I love and feel sad, that I never came to visit your first poem. Forgive me my friend. I'm glad I stopped by to read your first post... Love Linda

Paul Callus March 6, 2016 at 7:06 AM Hi Smriti:) This is one truly lovely poem which verges on the romantic...an abstract relationship built on yearning for mutual understanding and giving. #7 Red Fiery March 17, 2016 at 1:26 AM I wrote this poem when I was 17...I remember that time...I used to be so depressed...Time teaches you everything !

Debra Squyres January 4, 2012 at 9:57 AM It's beautiful !! Best of luck !!!

Carol Sunshine Brown January 4, 2012 at 5:52 AM Congratulations on making it through the 1st round of PoetrySoup International Contest. Wishing you the best in the finals Red. Love, Carol

Harry Horsman December 21, 2011 at 8:07 AM love to go to one's first poem on soup, i'm sure not disappointed, awesome. harry

Sidney Hall Mad Poet May 22, 2011 at 4:42 PM Wow this is an excellent poem. Can't wait to read the others. Oh! Welcome to the soup :-)

John Aaron Green May 22, 2011 at 1:31 PM wow, it is so wonderful and amazing....just like you,,,,keep it up friend...

Robert A. Dufresne May 21, 2011 at 5:22 PM You're flying high with this one , Smriti. I see you too have a love affair with words. Enjoyed your poem. Thanks you for your comment on Nefarious romance

Vince Suzadail Jr. May 3, 2011 at 6:29 PM This is different, Nice read. Vince

Ravi Kiran May 2, 2011 at 9:33 AM wonderful write...

Anthony O. Mitchell Jr. May 1, 2011 at 12:12 PM "The Sky" Most mntresting write. Me like.

Bonchance Longfall April 27, 2011 at 12:59 PM Really enjoyed this poem.

Carol Sunshine Brown April 27, 2011 at 4:55 AM Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Smriti. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta April 25, 2011 at 6:54 AM Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Smriti

Jslambert Mister Roboto April 24, 2011 at 4:37 AM Welcome to the SOUP. Happy Easter. ~JSLambert

Judy Konos April 21, 2011 at 2:30 PM I like it. Most unusual. Thank You

Matt Hunt April 20, 2011 at 4:57 PM Very good. The sky can have so many effects. Right now, it's been storming so the sky is very brutal. I enjoyed this poem as well. R.M.

Anne Rutherford April 19, 2011 at 5:16 PM Smiriti, profound poem . really like the line,'But I remined lost in my thoughts of isolation'. good one. great to see you here. Anne

Jasmine Turner April 19, 2011 at 3:59 PM i like it but i always thought the sky was an upraising thing and im only 10 so my poems may not be as sophisticated at they should be

Dr.Ram Mehta April 19, 2011 at 3:01 PM You have penned a lovely and beautiful personification of the sky bringing out its attributes with different expressions. Yes, Smriti you have the flair for writing and this is the right place for you. Good luck in your endeavor,

Gwendolen Song April 19, 2011 at 1:41 PM Welcome to Poetry Soup-you love the sky too? Many of the poets on this site will enjoy your poetry that reflects on nature. I especially like your line regarding the creatures flying and obeying-excellent. Again, welcome! Gwendolen

Carolyn Devonshire April 19, 2011 at 10:31 AM Very nice work, Smriti. I love the sky -- it makes me feel part of the universe. For me, it actually alleviates the loneliness. Staying inside alone is the worst place to be. Welcome to poetry soup! Best wishes, Carolyn

Renegade Poetry April 19, 2011 at 9:22 AM Don't we all wish to travel these horizons, these skies that teach us so much through life, hope for a sunny day we look up to the sky, when raining we look up to question why? Great write!

Daver Austin April 19, 2011 at 5:18 AM The sky is a wonderful method of detachment. Your idea of "merging" with the sky is great! I like your thinking. Keep writing. Love, daver

Carol Sunshine Brown April 19, 2011 at 4:15 AM A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Smriti. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol