The Sky

THE SKY Oh! Sky the lonely heart Dwelling upon my untiring soul Lost with an unspoken word. Fountain of misery teaches him That defiant endurance… Oh! Sky the lonely soul The creatures fly and obey But the hollowness prevails. The Sun burns him with anguish Yet he weeps with pride. Oh! Sky my undeniable hero You made me the undefeated queen, But I remained lost in my thoughts of isolation! Now I wish to merge in you Come my hero …my sky!

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/19/2016 5:53:00 AM

Your hero is divine Red, I love the merging of your soul. Laying to rest in the peaceful sky. Your quest is sentimental. I love and feel sad, that I never came to visit your first poem. Forgive me my friend. I'm glad I stopped by to read your first post... Love Linda

Paul Callus

Date: 3/6/2016 7:06:00 AM

Hi Smriti:) This is one truly lovely poem which verges on the romantic...an abstract relationship built on yearning for mutual understanding and giving. #7

Red Fiery
Date: 3/17/2016 1:26:00 AM

I wrote this poem when I was 17...I remember that time...I used to be so depressed...Time teaches you everything !

Debra Squyres

Date: 1/4/2012 9:57:00 AM

It's beautiful !! Best of luck !!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/4/2012 5:52:00 AM

Congratulations on making it through the 1st round of PoetrySoup International Contest. Wishing you the best in the finals Red. Love, Carol

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/21/2011 8:07:00 AM

love to go to one's first poem on soup, i'm sure not disappointed, awesome. harry

Sidney Hall Mad Poet

Date: 5/22/2011 4:42:00 PM

Wow this is an excellent poem. Can't wait to read the others. Oh! Welcome to the soup :-)

John Aaron Green

Date: 5/22/2011 1:31:00 PM

wow, it is so wonderful and amazing....just like you,,,,keep it up friend...

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 5/21/2011 5:22:00 PM

You're flying high with this one , Smriti. I see you too have a love affair with words. Enjoyed your poem. Thanks you for your comment on Nefarious romance

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 5/3/2011 6:29:00 PM

This is different, Nice read. Vince

Ravi Kiran

Date: 5/2/2011 9:33:00 AM

wonderful write...

Anthony O. Mitchell Jr.

Date: 5/1/2011 12:12:00 PM

"The Sky" Most mntresting write. Me like.

Bonchance Longfall

Date: 4/27/2011 12:59:00 PM

Really enjoyed this poem.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/27/2011 4:55:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Smriti. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/25/2011 6:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Smriti

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/24/2011 4:37:00 AM

Welcome to the SOUP. Happy Easter. ~JSLambert

Judy Konos

Date: 4/21/2011 2:30:00 PM

I like it. Most unusual. Thank You

Matt Hunt

Date: 4/20/2011 4:57:00 PM

Very good. The sky can have so many effects. Right now, it's been storming so the sky is very brutal. I enjoyed this poem as well. R.M.

Anne Rutherford

Date: 4/19/2011 5:16:00 PM

Smiriti, profound poem . really like the line,'But I remined lost in my thoughts of isolation'. good one. great to see you here. Anne

Jasmine Turner

Date: 4/19/2011 3:59:00 PM

i like it but i always thought the sky was an upraising thing and im only 10 so my poems may not be as sophisticated at they should be

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/19/2011 3:01:00 PM

You have penned a lovely and beautiful personification of the sky bringing out its attributes with different expressions. Yes, Smriti you have the flair for writing and this is the right place for you. Good luck in your endeavor,

Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/19/2011 1:41:00 PM

Welcome to Poetry Soup-you love the sky too? Many of the poets on this site will enjoy your poetry that reflects on nature. I especially like your line regarding the creatures flying and obeying-excellent. Again, welcome! Gwendolen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/19/2011 10:31:00 AM

Very nice work, Smriti. I love the sky -- it makes me feel part of the universe. For me, it actually alleviates the loneliness. Staying inside alone is the worst place to be. Welcome to poetry soup! Best wishes, Carolyn

Renegade Poetry

Date: 4/19/2011 9:22:00 AM

Don't we all wish to travel these horizons, these skies that teach us so much through life, hope for a sunny day we look up to the sky, when raining we look up to question why? Great write!

Daver Austin

Date: 4/19/2011 5:18:00 AM

The sky is a wonderful method of detachment. Your idea of "merging" with the sky is great! I like your thinking. Keep writing. Love, daver

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/19/2011 4:15:00 AM

A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Smriti. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol