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The Skeleton Tree

the skeleton tree
the grimm reminder showing
the future of me

the skeleton tree
natures voice without a choice
showing what i'll be

the skeleton tree
avoiding the ax and death
old age all that's left

arthaiku

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Juniper Lock

Date: 10/17/2012 11:36:00 AM

wow very cool haiku..I enjoyed reading..JL

Richard Palmer

Date: 7/12/2012 12:17:00 PM

nice flow great write,best wishes on becoming a skeleton tree John,lol

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 7/12/2012 3:58:00 AM

as I was checking out the winners' lists I happened to see your name there - I told you this is good, I like the rhyming in it, people say rhyming haiku is a big no-no but what do they know? haha I actually think haiku reads better when it rhymes, congrats :-)

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 7/12/2012 1:33:00 AM

Nice one John! Congrats on your win!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/11/2012 7:37:00 PM

John, a nice little sweet win, congratulations with hugs~LUV*PD

Joann Grisetti

Date: 7/11/2012 7:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning poem.

Marty Owens

Date: 7/11/2012 7:50:00 AM

Congrats on your win in the contest John...Marty

David Williams

Date: 7/11/2012 6:33:00 AM

John congrats on your win..David

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/11/2012 5:24:00 AM

Congratulations on your super win in Nathan's "Skeleton Tree" contest John III. Love, Carol

Kathryn Collins

Date: 7/9/2012 8:27:00 AM

John - Oh how I love that first one. Now these are great interpretations of this one. very fine. love, Kathy

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/7/2012 8:52:00 PM

A wonderful series of haiku John. Just got back from a week of holidays and a the last week babysitting and now a week at the shop. Life seems busy and computer time seems hard to find time. Thanks for your comments.Seen peaks of all kinds and while riding I was inspired. God made a beautiful planet. Hope all is well with you. love phyl

Cindy Lu

Date: 7/6/2012 9:39:00 PM

truths, simple language that I can understand, I like it... :) Always admiring you, trying so hard to do the right thing, much love, Cindy

David O'Haolin Whalen

Date: 7/6/2012 7:19:00 PM

three very nice haikus, and as a bonus they rhyme somewhat, usually something that is more common to Senryu, but I think it really works here also. Good write John!

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 7/6/2012 3:49:00 PM

all the brilliance of the other one condensed into haiku form (equating barrenness with the skeleton tree, that was a stroke of genius) I like these personified trees, I did a couple of them, elm and yew, but our trees are always sad ones, well apart from my yew which was a bit evil haha