David Kavanagh Poet Tanka

The Rudiments of Wings

ones lifetime pursuit 
            mind and heart are in dispute 
                     faith not absolute
             now arrives moment of truth 
                trust in god or parachute


This or That, Vol 10 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh 
Tanka form PS 5/7/5/7/7
02/19/22

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Edward Ibeh March 2, 2022 at 4:04 PM Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest, David:-) This small poem packs a wallop! A delightful read, for sure. David Kavanagh March 3, 2022 at 1:59 AM Thank you Edward, I fully appreciate your placement in such a thought provoking contest, cheers David

Tom Cunningham February 19, 2022 at 6:04 AM Damned if you do dammed if you don't. Take a few risks or you'll have regrets. Just back from a week away hope you're keeping well David. Tom David Kavanagh February 19, 2022 at 7:13 AM I’ve taken my fair share of risks over the years Tom, this one is probably more about what’s exactly going through the individuals mind, in that split second when you just cannot be sure who’s in charge of your life, hope you enjoyed the break, I’m off in march for a week, cheers David

Alexis Y. February 18, 2022 at 5:54 PM WoW! David, You've penned such a well-written Tanka. I echo what Paulette said. Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day and weekend-Alexis David Kavanagh February 19, 2022 at 4:28 AM Heya Alexis, the things that might keep us awake at night, do we pray when pulling the ripcord, or simply have faith it will open, cheers David

Paulette Calasibetta February 18, 2022 at 4:00 PM Very profound Tanka~"Trust in God or Parachute".....love it. Good luck in the contest! :)Paulette David Kavanagh February 19, 2022 at 4:23 AM Thank you Paula, A question that may only be answered when pulling the ripcord, are we praying it opens or trusting that it will, cheers David

Sotto Poet February 18, 2022 at 3:41 PM WOW, David, what an exquisitely composed Tanka. Your poem captivates me and leads me to ponder. You encompassed all facets of human intrigues and inquiries in a few words and five lines. The final two lines summarize the life fight. David Kavanagh February 19, 2022 at 4:19 AM The poser Lasaad I suppose is when the push comes to the shove, do we really put our absolute faith in human hands or a Gods trust, thank you so much for an understanding comment, cheers David