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The Red Wheelbarrow

How I loved spending a week of the summer holidays with my grandparents. Gramps would come and pick me up in his old pick- up truck, dad would bundle my suitcase into the back and I’d be on my way. Gramps would whistle as we wended our way along the winding country lanes until we reached their stone cottage. Grandma would be waiting for us to appear at the door, she always be wearing her checked apron which was flecked with flour. She’d scoop me up in her arms, and carry me into the cosy kitchen where the aroma of cooling gingerbread lingered in the air.

wheat from the old mill
freshly ground into white flour
grandma’s been baking

I would spend many hours in the garden with gramps, in the spring I’d helped him to plant lots of vegetable seeds and now summer had arrived they were ready to be harvested. Gramps would give me a ride in his old wooden red wheelbarrow, the wheel would squeak as he pushed me along the uneven ground and I would squeal with delight when we went over the bumps.  In the vegetable garden we would pick perfect pea pods that were fit to burst with juicy green peas, bright orange carrots and creamy cauliflowers which reminded me of brains. All the produce would be placed into the wheelbarrow and I would help gramps to trundle it along the path to the kitchen door. Grandma would be busy in the kitchen and I’d help by podding the peas ready for our evening meal. I loved the popping sound of the pods as I pressed them to release the shiny peas. 

from a tiny seed
colourful vegetables grow
harvest time arrives

Many years have elapsed, and sadly gramps and grandma are no longer with us. My father inherited their little stone cottage, which was eventually handed down to me. I now spend happy hours in the garden with my own grandson, and I’m passing on the gardening tips that gramps taught me when I was a small child. The red wooden wheelbarrow which I loved riding in is long gone; but I replaced it with a sturdy one made of shiny red plastic. My grandson loves riding in it to the vegetable patch and I love to hear him squeal with delight as I once did when I rode the same bumpy path.  

the red wheelbarrow 
reminds me of my grandpa
precious memories

Fiction write

For Your Poetry Journal Poetry Contest
Contest
Sponsored by Dear Heart a.k.a Broken Wings

7/28/18
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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La France Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 2:42 PM
Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing write, really well done ~
Allison Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 2:46 PM
Thanks so much Constance I love the haibun form:-) hugs Jan xx
Mandani Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 10:03 AM
Very nice.
Allison Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 11:23 AM
Thanks Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx
Gentry Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 7:31 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. A wonderful memory, well-written haibun. Enjoyed.
Allison Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 7:42 PM
I only wish it was a true story Susan:-) hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 1:30 AM
You took me on a great ride with your wonderful story telling, Jan:) congrats on a great win:)
Allison Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 2:44 PM
Thanks Jo, I only wish it had been true:-) hugs Jan xx
Wade Avatar
August 7, 2018 at 7:09 AM
Well written, congratulations on your win. Faux
Allison Avatar
August 7, 2018 at 7:20 AM
Thanks Faux:-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 7, 2018 at 6:25 AM
Yay Jan! I had a feeling this would score high. It sounded so real and pulled at the heartstrings. Congratulations on your very deserving First Place! I am so happy for you! : )
Allison Avatar
August 7, 2018 at 6:57 AM
Oh wow thanks Connie I am delighted Constance liked it!:-) I so enjoy writing this from:-):-) hugs jan xx
Kendrick Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 5:50 PM
Ahh!! I would have thought it was very much a part of your life. Enjoyed reading your contest entry. Reads like a good contender. Sara
Allison Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 5:56 PM
Thanks Sara I wish i had grandparents but it was not to be, just a step step grandma and we were never close:-( hugs Jan xx
Krampe Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 7:26 AM
This is beautiful, Jan, very vivid and I love the details. Great take on the contest prompt - and I had to chuckle when I saw that you did not know the original WCW poem that inspired the prompt :)
Allison Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 7:30 AM
I've just read it Agnes it is short sweet and very lovely. I am not well read at all as I truly detested poetry at school... how things have changed:-) hugs Jan xx
White Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 7:12 AM
WCW , William Carlos Williams wrote his famous "The Red Wheelbarrow", which is one of my personal favourite poems, because it's in reality a painting with words. So your poem immediately attracted my attention. And I love it :) thank you for a very different wheelbarrow!
Allison Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 7:21 AM
I am not well read in poetry in fact I hated it at school so its a shock I now love writing. Will drop by and read this poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Melugin Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 5:28 AM
Jan!!! You dazzle memories! Book Book Book Book!!!!! The Red Wheelbarrow....Gardening By Grandpa! Go for it girl!
Allison Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 5:45 AM
Aww Chuck that is a sweet comment. I wish i had had grandparents and then I could write from real life experience, sadly all my poems come from my imagination:-( hugs jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 12:05 AM
This sure didn't sound like fiction Jan...as I said before you could be a writer...a novel perhaps as your imagination knows no bounds! I loved this story and your haiku were woven in splendidly. I see a winner here! Kudos on a great entry! A Fave! ; )
Allison Avatar
July 30, 2018 at 5:44 AM
I wonder what would have happened if I'd started writing sooner Connie ... a poetry book of my silly poems will happen one day but not a novel:-) I do love the haibun form:-) hugs Jan xx
Rose  Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 6:27 PM
Its sounds like you own man rich memories of the past, and family. How truly blessed you are for both the memories and the writing skill to express it, so many years later. Gl in the contest,
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 6:37 PM
I wish I did have the memories Pixie it is written from pure imagination:-( hugs JAN xx
Dietrich Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 3:23 PM
Did I see the poem you wanted me to see? I'm guessing it was the other one?
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 3:28 PM
Yes it was the dancing one lol:-) hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 3:22 PM
You make it seem so real, Jan. Until I saw a grandkid mentioned and then I knew it was fiction. haha. Good one for Constance. If there is a choice not haibun, I am sure I'll be going in that other direction!!
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 3:28 PM
There are two choices but I love writing this form so I went with it... maybe get grand kids one day - I hope to see them before I pop my clogs! hugs Jan xx
Toney Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 1:45 PM
Jan, your Haibun is vividly written, it flows so freely, and it made me feel wonderful! (Even if it didn't really happen...Lol :) Such a cute photo.
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 1:48 PM
Thanks Mark I do enjoy writing this form, just wish it had been true and I do love the aroma of freshly baked cakes but rarely bake these days as hubby is now diabetic:-( hugs jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 1:02 PM
I love those trips down memory lane Jan, sad that those days can't last forever but time marches on for us all. Lovely verse, good luck. Tom
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 1:12 PM
Thanks Tom, I just wish it had been true:-( hugs jan xx
Callus Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 12:05 PM
Indeed, these are lovely memories, even if they are just the fruit of ripe imagination, Jan! My own memories of time spent at my g'parents' house and farm will stay with me for ever! Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
July 29, 2018 at 12:08 PM
Thanks for being the first to comment Paul. Wish I;d had grandparents but sadly it wasn't to be - only a step step grandma and we were never close:-( hugs jan xx
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