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The Red Gown

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Bitter tears fall from her sapphire blue eyes Sally strolls in the place where they first met Dropping to her knees she prays to the skies The love of her life she cannot forget Sally strolls in the place where they first met Wearing the red gown she wore when they’d wed The love of her life she cannot forget Thoughts of his love will always fill her head Wearing the red gown she wore when they’d wed She wipes away tears that she has just cried Thoughts of his love will always fill her head Recalling the pain when her loved one died She wipes away tears that she has just cried Dropping to her knees she prays to the skies Recalling the pain when her loved one died Bitter tears fall from her sapphire blue eyes Written for Pantoum contest Checked with how many syllables 10 per line 09~28~16

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John Michaels

Date: 8/1/2017 12:37:00 PM

Amazing stuff, Jan. Powerful, emotive write that brought a real lump to my throat. Congratulations on your win. Kind regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2017 4:06:00 PM

Thanks so much John I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 10/22/2016 3:50:00 PM

this is beautiful, Jan x

Jan Allison
Date: 5/6/2017 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Jack sorry I've just found your comment:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/17/2016 8:29:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win :-) Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2016 4:54:00 PM

Many thanks Eve I try extra hard for your pantoum contests:-) Thanks so much for introducing them to us:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 10/17/2016 12:12:00 PM

Congrats on your win with ths melancholy writer

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/17/2016 11:36:00 AM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks so much Alexis I am very behind on soup, writing and commenting at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/6/2016 8:35:00 AM

Oh, so sad...but a gem of a pantoum, Jan:) I want this to win:)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2016 2:53:00 PM

Thanks Jo I have so loved writing this form which Eve introduced to me through her contests - i love the impact of the repeated lines - got to say I love this poem too:-) I hope it proves I am more than just a humourous writer:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/30/2016 12:55:00 PM

How beautiful this is..How beautiful...A fave.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2016 12:58:00 PM

Thanks Charma I was captivated by the picture which I found in May - I knew I would use it to inspire a poem. Its rare for me to find a picture first but this one was so striking I had to save it:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 9/30/2016 8:34:00 AM

Jan your pantoum is just beautiful ~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2016 8:56:00 AM

Aww thanks Constance - I was inspired by the picture which I found in May time - just needed the right contest to come up so I could use it:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/29/2016 6:01:00 AM

Beautiful Jan! Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2016 7:27:00 AM

Thanks Rick I found the pic probably in May time and saved it as I knew one day I would use it to inspire a poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2016 11:45:00 PM

wow, Jan, you made a beautiful pantoum here. Truly a gem, my friend!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2016 2:15:00 AM

Thanks so much Andrea:-) I think I have finally proved I can write poems other than ones on poop - I really enjoy the challenge of this form:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/28/2016 5:10:00 PM

A nicely penned emotional write Jan...best wishes

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 5:14:00 PM

Thanks Joseph I do enjoy the challenge of this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/28/2016 12:49:00 PM

- Jan, if i was going write this .... my ink would became invisible ..... written with tears - A lot of emotion and beautiful - Good luck in the contest - (7) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 1:49:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise :-) I found the picture probably in May time and thought it was so stunning i would use it to inspire a poem and this is the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Anu Nayak

Date: 9/28/2016 12:04:00 PM

Dear Jan, sad story.... but a beautifully constructed Pantoum , liked it, a 7!...good luck in the contest:).love, Anu:)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 1:50:00 PM

Thanks Anu:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/28/2016 11:50:00 AM

Very sad Jan. Those memories will never fade.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 1:52:00 PM

Thanks Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 9/28/2016 11:14:00 AM

excellant jan and love the pic , ticked all the boxes must be a top ten x stephen

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 11:48:00 AM

Thanks Stephen:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/28/2016 9:27:00 AM

aww...sad .. can feel the pain with every word

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 9:40:00 AM

Thanks Cas I really love writing this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/28/2016 9:02:00 AM

That is one hard hitting, dramatic Pantoum - you rocked this one, Jan. Woo wee ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 9:04:00 AM

I love the form and always try hard to write a good poem for Eve's contests:-) hugs jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/28/2016 8:57:00 AM

Jan, your talent is never ending! Yes, it is a sad poem but very impressive is the form and flow. Good luck for this well written pantoum, although I doubt you'll need it:)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 9:04:00 AM

You are too kind Daniel! One day I think I will wake up an writing poetry will just have been an amazing dream. I love this form which Eve introduced me to in a contest and always try hard to please her:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/28/2016 8:42:00 AM

Hi Jan, This is such a sad well written piece. I could feel the heartache in every line. I'm sure you will be on the winners list with this heartfelt write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven-Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2016 8:44:00 AM

Thanks Alexis - Eve introudced me to this form with her contests and I really enjoy the challenge:-) I found the picture some months ago and saved it as it is so beautiful I knew it would inspire me to write a poem one day:-) hugs Jan xx