The Raid

The bloodshot moon merged into the dark, hazy night.
People wandered aimlessly, avoiding a fight.
A sultry bar still open, dispensing hard stuff.
Bootleggers were abundant till the game got rough.

A man sat in a corner observing the scene,
The boozers drank too much like goblins dark of mien.
The quiet man went to a phone booth and whispered,
The platoon was ready, their commands were answered.

A large police squad arrested the offenders,
All were fined, and none offered any false contenders.
Did they learn their lesson and mend their wicked ways?
Go to nearby villages and consider their days.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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George Avatar
September 21, 2025 at 11:11 PM
Too much of drinking becomes a social menace. Someone should be bold enough to report it. Let there be occasional raids.
Goldsmith Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 2:22 PM
"The Raid" is a wonderful write/story. Great Ending... Love your line, " The quiet man went to a phone booth and whispered,." I remember them... Have a Blessed day/weekend writing away..
Godwin Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 12:27 PM
Very well written, impressive story, Victor. Your pen delivers! Did you find my Soup message? I enjoyed the read. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
DiMino Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 9:28 AM
Yep, good to cover one's back. A little drinky-poo is alright. If one has not learned how after years of mistakes...don't touch it!
Greenhough Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 7:16 PM
I like this well crafted story that has a slight tinge of pirates. Or perhaps their ilk today. Booze is the downfall of many.
Etgen-Baker Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 4:29 PM
I'd like to think they 'learned their lesson,' but perhaps I've seen too many negative TV shows and news....just doesn't seem probable...nicely penned poem, though
Allison Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 4:05 PM
I doubt they learned a lesson Victor, pay their fines and do it all again and again hugs Jan xx
Sharma Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 10:19 AM
A common scene all over the world now a days.
Edmonds  Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 9:29 AM
I doubt those drinkers would have learnt their lesson, their happiness is a bar at the end of the day… Beryl
Andresen Avatar
September 19, 2025 at 1:46 AM
- "Did they learn their lesson and mend their wicked ways?" ... no, they continued elsewhere ... - Great writing, Victor :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
Hind Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 11:20 PM
Cool write,
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