The Promising Island

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Just a short text I wrote for the prompt "Paradise of Hope."

On his raft, the lone traveler was now at a couple of cable lengths from the two islands. He could distinctively see the trees. He smiled. At last, he would have some fresh fruits to eat instead of conserves and salty ham. To reach to forest, one had a cliff to climb. The other had a welcoming beach. He chose the warm sand glistening in the sun. The paradise of hope was clear. Above all, for the inhabitants of the island, hungry cannibals, happy to see fresh meat.

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Christina Bowring

Date: 4/25/2024 11:02:00 AM

A gripping read especially that ending! Oh no - not going to end well for the traveler. I enjoyed reading this well written piece. A matter of choice - the right or wrong one? Just goes to show, like you said, the easiest choice is not always the best one. Enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing. :):)

A. Ormulyce
Date: 4/25/2024 8:11:00 PM

Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed reading this piece. Right, "the easiest choice is not always the best one." Have a nice day.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/5/2024 8:22:00 AM

Dear A., This is a captivating journey of hope and peril. The fantastic imagery and unexpected twist left me on the edge of my seat. It's a powerful reminder of the complexities of desire and the dangers that lurk beneath the surface. This thought-provoking piece. - Blessings, Daniel

A. Ormulyce
Date: 3/5/2024 8:37:00 AM

Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed reading this piece. Easy and comfortable ways are not always the best choice. Have a great day :)