Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

The Pointy End of a Triangle

I loved a woman who loved two men.
She consumed me from the inside.
There are times I remember back then.
When she chose him it hurt my pride.

She consumed me from the inside.
I thought about her night and day.
When she chose him it hurt my pride.
It took all my courage to walk away.

I thought about her night and day.
A strange obsession that consumed my mind.
It took all my courage to walk away.
She baptized me in a love that made me blind.

A strange obsession that consumed my mind.
I deserved more than she was able to give.
She baptized me in a love that made me blind.
Now that the chains are gone I'm able to live.

I deserved more than she was able to give.
My moral compass helped me find the way.
Now the chains are gone I'm able to live.
Although she was amazing I could not be her slave.

My moral compass helped me find the way.
There are times I remember back then.
Although she was amazing I could not be her slave.
I loved a woman who loved two men.

Hi Debbie, I gave it a try. I like my other poem so
I am leaving that one as it was. Thanks for making
me think about the form.

Content inspired by Sarai Romani's poem "Morality is War"

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Jeff Connelly September 17, 2019 at 7:51 AM Great style and use of form Richard. I randomly chose page 7 of the list of all your poems, then saw this one had 1111 reads; so I wanted to break that number up and be your 1112 reader lol. This seems a true story Richard, but maybe that's just my feeling. It's always great to read the writer's thoughts behind the scene. Jeff Connelly September 17, 2019 at 2:47 PM Lol Richard, it is odd but later today I was making a make shift no noodle eggplant lasagna and I needed to set a timer and the time was 11:11 no shit... Am I allowed to say that here? Well I just did lol. Richard Lamoureux September 17, 2019 at 8:23 AM Ha ha, I like 1112 better. Thanks for the visit.

Shadow Hamilton April 15, 2014 at 5:05 AM to be I meant

Shadow Hamilton April 15, 2014 at 5:04 AM a triangle is always hard to deal with Rick we all want to the others exclusive love hugs Richard Lamoureux April 15, 2014 at 8:11 AM For me I have to be in an exclusive relationship. I am thankful that I met my sweetie and I could never share her in that way.

Poet Tacito April 9, 2014 at 7:58 AM Been there a few times myself. Well, their loss...thankfully, and this is most important, you became stronger & wiser from it. Many "men" lose their identity when in a similar situation. Very nicely done! Richard Lamoureux April 9, 2014 at 8:04 AM Thanks Drake. In the moment it felt like the end of the world.

Monterey Sirak April 9, 2014 at 7:47 AM I like the 'pointy end' theme. When you divide your attentions too many ways you lose focus entirely. Richard Lamoureux April 9, 2014 at 8:03 AM Good morning Monterey. So nice to start my day with a visit from you.

Ken Carroll April 7, 2014 at 5:39 PM Good stuff Richard! Hope all is well with you.. Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 5:49 PM Thanks Ken, all is well. This happened over 22 years ago.

Kelly Deschler April 7, 2014 at 5:24 PM Powerful words, expressed in a wonderful poetic way. Another great poem from you, Richard! Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 5:49 PM Thanks Kelly.

Tim Smith April 7, 2014 at 3:38 PM What a great Pantoum Richard...The hard part is getting over the obsession. We don't think we can live without that person in our lives but the reality is we are better off without them. Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 4:33 PM That is so true Tim.

Nette Onclaud April 7, 2014 at 11:57 AM lovely christening of your new pantuom , richard!.. well expressed sentiments!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 1:44 PM Thanks Nette, trying to continue to learn.

Eileen Manassian April 7, 2014 at 11:48 AM She didn't deserve you....or the man in the poem....lovely write....as always Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 1:48 PM Thanks Eileen, she was a good person just a bit confused. All part of growing up. I hope she found what she was looking for.

Jan Allison April 7, 2014 at 11:28 AM Fascinating read Richard loved the repetition of the lines - really powerfully constructed with an interesting lesson in morality. Hugs Jan x Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 1:56 PM Thanks Jan, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Debbie Guzzi April 7, 2014 at 11:28 AM Hi there kiddo, yes this is a correct pattern ;) as you know the other verse had more heart BUT no one's Shakespeare first time out of the gate hey, I've heard it said Sjakespeare was actually more than one man ! LOL Light & Love Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 1:50 PM Thanks for the help Deb, kind of like learning to drive a car, the initial drive is a bit awkward until you stop thinking and start feeling the vehicle.