The Phantom Horse

A phantom horse came galloping 
beneath a silver moon
across a field of recent war 
where corpses’ bones lay strewn.

With thunder in his hoof beats,
again and then again,
he raced along a river which,
like blood, ran through that plain.

Though frightful he appeared to be
on land that reeked demise,
a sole intent gleamed strongly
in his sad and ghostly eyes.

Then finally, as dawn began
to paint the broad stretch red,
the unrelenting stallion stopped
and seemed to bow his head.

He briefly knelt, then stood upright
and bore away, with speed,
the spirit of the knight for whom
he’d been a trusty steed!

2014 post for Angela Tune's A Ghost Story Poetry Contest
Submitted Oct. 13, 2022 
for Mark Toney's  2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 17 Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Roper Avatar
January 14, 2022 at 7:42 AM
Great write, Andrea, congratulations on your win. Hugs and hope you have a blessed year my friend.
Daniel Avatar
January 14, 2022 at 12:15 AM
An excellent poem and a wonderful win, Andrea:) congratulations:)
Radhakrishna Avatar
January 14, 2022 at 12:12 AM
Andrea, this is a fabulous poem! It is so well written we can see the horse galloping about his ethereal work! we can even hear the galloping hoofs! Brilliant!
Rodrigues Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 12:50 PM
Love this tale, though sad! Congratulations on top win!
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 12:04 PM
I always loved this poem Andrea. Congratulations on having it honored with the trophy win! A Fave. xxoo There is a beautiful poem called “War Horse” you may enjoy reading at: https://www.horseandman.com/horse-stories/poem-for-a-war-horse/01/12/2021/
Flood Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 10:52 AM
Marvellous tale and spot on rhyme. A well deserved first place, Andrea. Congratulations. Terry
Peck Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 9:34 AM
I love it--it's wonderful, Andrea. Sad and stately at the same time. I love that you made his horse a hero--it touched my heart :)
Lillico  Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 7:19 AM
Poignant, poetic and a perfect win! Congratulations!
Alex Avatar
January 13, 2022 at 7:08 AM
Such great! You are an all rounder of topics. Congratulations!
Gauthier Avatar
May 25, 2019 at 6:15 PM
Awesome rhythm, Andrea. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Haight Avatar
May 25, 2019 at 5:21 PM
I enjoyed the mysterious, phantom-like feeling through your words and rhythm, Andrea! Congratulations on your fine placement. Hugs, Sandra
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 7:34 PM
This sounds familiar Andrea. Reminds me of that movie about warhorse that was so wonderful. Congratulations on your win. I am glad to be on this shortlist with you . By the way, I have actually seen the touch lights on the mountain side where no roads lead to. It is spooky. xxoo : )
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 6:58 AM
My heartfelt thanks with no end, for your participation Andrea, CHEERS indeed for your placement in the Epic Ethereal Editor Contest, Aloha William Kekaula
Scars Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 9:09 AM
Andrea, you never cease to amaze me, congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
Nusker Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 12:05 AM
Andrea, every time I read a poem of yours, I fall in love with it. Your poems are so deep & meaningful. You are a terribly good Poet. My best regards. Afzal :~)
Grahamburglar Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 6:23 PM
Awesome concept, and beautifully written. Congratulations on the win. -G
A  Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 12:33 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on your win in SKAT'S "Premiere Contest number 9" It was my pleasure judging this one for my sister. Stop by and enjoy your win on Skat's Blog "BLACKBIRDS." with lots of love LINDA (For: SKAT)
A   Avatar
July 29, 2014 at 1:56 PM
Andrea, A nice winning Quatrain. I don't know the form, however --Well done... Always ~LINDA
Lindley Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 8:39 PM
Beautiful write my friend! Congrats on your win!!
Smith Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 11:50 AM
Beautiful tribute to a magnificent animal, dear Andrea.. Congrats on a great win.. Hugs.. Arlene
Lamoureux Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 10:46 AM
This made me think of the movie War Horse. A well told tale Andrea, congrats on your win.
A. Sharma Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 9:11 AM
Very lovely exclusive write Andrea! Loved much,, congrats on win!
Chutani Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 8:08 AM
wonderful poem, Andrea. Maybe, the rhyme slipped away in the nice flow, it otherwise made. Congrats, Mohan
Mehta Avatar
July 28, 2014 at 1:33 AM
Enjoyed the haunting of the ghost, Andrea. Congrats. How is it that you missed rhyme scheme? Can't believe it
Deschler Avatar
July 27, 2014 at 9:38 PM
Wonderful work, Andrea! I really loved this haunting, ghost story!.... However, it was missing the ABAB rhyme scheme that I was looking for, so I could only give this an Honorable Mention. Congrats on your win! Your poem deserves a much higher place, though! :)
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