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The Owl

moon setting silver pine trees pierce a grounded cloud swirling wake of wings Composed for Let The Pens Flow - Haiku Poetry Contest Sponsored by Jenish Somadas 04/19/2020

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Frances Schiavina

Date: 5/19/2020 8:05:00 AM

This poem is beautiful!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/19/2020 9:32:00 AM

Thank you Frances! ~mo :)))

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/8/2020 11:19:00 AM

I'll let you in on a little secret: I'm pretty picky about haiku, and it's my opinion that not many on this site know how to write a proper one. That being said, I like the mood you observed here: the grounded cloud being pierced by the pine trees is such a cool image. My only critique (and not many would agree with me here) is that I think haiku should be untitled.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/8/2020 1:50:00 PM

I'm picky too, and you are right, traditional haiku is title-less. I think my language still a little too flowery too. Nor is 5/7/5 a prerequisite either, but when in Rome... I would not try to pull this off in Japan. I do love the challenge of writing haiku, and would say very few of mine are really that good or true. More just free verse packaged in a ku box.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/3/2020 8:38:00 PM

Beautiful imagery. I especially love the middle line.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/4/2020 7:50:00 AM

Thank you Juliet! xomo

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/3/2020 5:20:00 PM

lovely imagery, Maureen ~

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/4/2020 7:49:00 AM

Thank you Line! You and Mick Talbot my ku gurus ;), xomo

Mohan Chutani

Date: 4/29/2020 9:09:00 AM

Maureen, a piercing haiku. Congrats.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/29/2020 9:39:00 AM

Thank you Mohan, stay safe! xomo

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/29/2020 6:04:00 AM

Beautiful imagery; gorgeously done Maureen. Whee.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/29/2020 8:16:00 AM

Thank you Caren! I am proud of this one. Been working on my ku. x!

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/27/2020 9:06:00 PM

Oh yes! Swirling wake of wings and silent as the night's fog! Such beautiful ambiance and action. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan <3

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/28/2020 7:29:00 AM

Thank you Susan <3 stay safe! xomo

Edlynn Nau

Date: 4/27/2020 10:45:00 AM

Lovely! We have lots of owls here. Perfect setting for those night wings to stretch!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/28/2020 7:27:00 AM

Thank you Edlynn! Lots of owls; blessed! I have managed to see a couple in town, and their traces... xomo

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/27/2020 9:18:00 AM

Oh, yes! This is wonderful! I can see and hear it! You write like nature itself, which waits patiently to be seen in snippets.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/27/2020 9:37:00 AM

Thank you, and, wow <3

Solomon Ochwo-Oburu

Date: 4/27/2020 12:01:00 AM

Strong imagination, Maureen. A mentor you.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/27/2020 7:59:00 AM

Your kind words humble me. Thank you my friend. xomo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2020 3:25:00 PM

Here is one I really liked the first time I saw it, and I still do. Congrats for the win.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/27/2020 8:00:00 AM

Thank you Andrea. Has anyone told you lately that you are one of the most cherished, kindest, most supportive poets here? xomo

Charlie Knowlton

Date: 4/26/2020 2:27:00 PM

Congrats Maureen…Always love your Ku`s.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/27/2020 8:06:00 AM

Thank you Charlie! As I love your Senryu's, so much. xomo

Jenish Somadas

Date: 4/26/2020 1:28:00 PM

Wonderful imagery... Congrats Maureen..

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/27/2020 8:07:00 AM

Thank you Jenish! For my placement and for poking my slumbering muse. xomo

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/26/2020 4:50:00 AM

I Like this very much awesome write. Haven't communicated in a while, thought I'd drop by.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/26/2020 10:33:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer, delighted to 'see' you! Stay safe and write on! xomo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/25/2020 11:36:00 PM

A really good one, Maureen! Janice

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/26/2020 10:31:00 AM

Thank you Janice! Poetry hugs, xomo

Sandra Adams

Date: 4/25/2020 6:37:00 PM

this is beautiful and vivid...it made me think of a snow owl we saw when I was young... something I never forgot... best wishes in the contest....hugs

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/26/2020 10:30:00 AM

I have not seen one of those, but the barred owl and the saw whet owls that I hacpve seen are seared into my memory :) delighted to reignite the memory, thank you! xomo

Date: 4/25/2020 4:03:00 PM

You darling of all darlings. I love owls! Pale, silent ghost of brown and cream I hear your call like baby's scream..

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/26/2020 10:27:00 AM

Thank you (?) ;),

Curtis Johnson

Date: 4/25/2020 10:28:00 AM

Hi, Maureen. So kind of you for the comment on "Don't Run". I wish you well on this Haiku. Blessings.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/26/2020 10:26:00 AM

Thank you Curtis, take care, xomo