The Onslaught of Night

I look to the sky
through a dirty window pane.
The sun sets again.

by Robert Pettit 
for Michael J. Falotico's "An Haiku From Your Window" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Brown Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 5:47 AM
Belated congratulations on your placement Robert, in the contest "An Haiku From Your Window" sponsored by Michael J. Falotico. Love, Carol
Freeman Avatar
February 13, 2011 at 2:31 PM
Congratulations Robert on your worthy poem's honored place. Agape, Moses
George   Avatar
February 9, 2011 at 4:19 AM
Robert! This is a Haiku Masterpiece. Many congrats. Lainie
Mannan Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 8:06 PM
Awesome image Robert. Many congratulations for this win.
Dietrich Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 2:56 PM
wow, I had not seen this one yet, Robert.It's awesome and love the title too! (I don't care about haiku not supposed to have titles because I think they are so fun to use them here!) A big congratulations to you and highest rank! LUv, andrea
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February 8, 2011 at 2:34 PM
One of the first I read and I like it from the start... thank you so much for entering my contest... and for you great write...Michael
Calhoun Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 9:23 AM
Hi Robert - CONGRATULATIONS on your BIG WIN in Michael's contest. Best wishes, KC
Devonshire Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 9:10 AM
Delighted to see your compelling poem on the winners' list, Robert. Congratulations. Love, Carolyn
Richards Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 8:37 AM
So glad to see this orginal and clever poem in the winner's circle! A bottle of windex is in the mail for you!! LOL !! Congratulations, Robert!!
Fillmore Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 8:02 AM
I see this Robert:) Best of luck in the contest! Thanks for your comment on "Camel Travel", much appreciated!
Guzzi Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 7:24 AM
congrad's on your win! Light & Love
Kendrick Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 7:15 AM
Different approach..Congratulations on your win..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
February 8, 2011 at 4:41 AM
Congrats Robert on your wonderful win in Michael's Haiku from my window contest with this creative and visual write my friend.. enjoy another chart topping victory with luv..
Tate Avatar
February 6, 2011 at 2:25 PM
Robert, short and to the point, perfect haiku. Thanks for pointing out my typo for the Architect poem.
Richards Avatar
February 6, 2011 at 12:33 PM
I love the description of the window itself!! Great imagination!!
Devonshire Avatar
February 6, 2011 at 10:11 AM
Really like the way you said "onslaught" instead of "onset" of night, Robert. It adds to the dreariness of the vision you paint. Compelling entry for the contest and hope to see your poem in the winners' circle. Love, Carolyn
Roberts Avatar
February 6, 2011 at 9:19 AM
wonderful haiku, good luck in Michaels contest
Kendrick Avatar
February 6, 2011 at 8:57 AM
Interesting direction to go for the contest..Reads like winner's circle to me...Good luck..Sara
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