Timothy Mcguire Poet Free verse

The Old Jalopy

That jalopy is still puttin' along
Slow start on cold mornings
Loud stinky foul exhaust
And the finish is quite weathered

His seat is lumpy
He uses a lot of fuel
Not as fast anymore
And has a screw loose somewhere

But she tells her girlfriends
She still loves her husband
After forty two years
Even if he's not the man he used to be

The Old Jalopy Poetry Contest
7/9/19

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Charles Messina July 28, 2019 at 7:05 AM Nice one Tim. Good vibes...Congratulations on your placement. Timothy Mcguire July 28, 2019 at 7:16 AM Thanks Charles

Craig Cornish July 28, 2019 at 6:56 AM Made me smile Tim - we, ourselves, become those old jalopies - still loved we pray Timothy Mcguire July 28, 2019 at 7:15 AM You are right craig!

Connie Marcum Wong July 28, 2019 at 12:11 AM I wasn't expecting your ending Tim. I loved the metaphors and being taken by surprise! Congratulations on your deserving win! : ) Timothy Mcguire July 28, 2019 at 12:31 AM Thank you Miss Connie

Line Gauthier July 27, 2019 at 9:41 PM Back to congratulate you on a most deserving win, Timothy. Timothy Mcguire July 28, 2019 at 12:32 AM Thank you Miss Line

Kim Rodrigues July 27, 2019 at 6:14 PM Love the comparison! Congratulations, Timothy! Timothy Mcguire July 27, 2019 at 6:24 PM Thank you Kim

Janice Canerdy July 27, 2019 at 3:36 PM Tim, CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Love that ending! Janice Timothy Mcguire July 27, 2019 at 3:56 PM Thank you Janice

CayCay Godwin July 26, 2019 at 1:02 AM Most witty, loved the truth revealing, so clever, Tim - you got my grin! Poetry hugs ... CayCay Timothy Mcguire July 26, 2019 at 1:41 AM Thank you CayCay!

Line Gauthier July 9, 2019 at 9:41 PM Awesome take on the challenge, Timothy. Most endearing. Timothy Mcguire July 9, 2019 at 10:46 PM Thank you Line. Ill send you a note on this one.