Get Your Premium Membership

The Old Jalopy

That jalopy is still puttin' along Slow start on cold mornings Loud stinky foul exhaust And the finish is quite weathered His seat is lumpy He uses a lot of fuel Not as fast anymore And has a screw loose somewhere But she tells her girlfriends She still loves her husband After forty two years Even if he's not the man he used to be The Old Jalopy Poetry Contest 7/9/19

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment
Date: 7/28/2019 7:05:00 AM
Nice one Tim. Good vibes...Congratulations on your placement.
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/28/2019 7:16:00 AM
Thanks Charles
Date: 7/28/2019 6:56:00 AM
Made me smile Tim - we, ourselves, become those old jalopies - still loved we pray
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/28/2019 7:15:00 AM
You are right craig!
Date: 7/28/2019 12:11:00 AM
I wasn't expecting your ending Tim. I loved the metaphors and being taken by surprise! Congratulations on your deserving win! : )
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/28/2019 12:31:00 AM
Thank you Miss Connie
Date: 7/27/2019 9:41:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on a most deserving win, Timothy.
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/28/2019 12:32:00 AM
Thank you Miss Line
Date: 7/27/2019 6:14:00 PM
Love the comparison! Congratulations, Timothy!
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/27/2019 6:24:00 PM
Thank you Kim
Date: 7/27/2019 3:36:00 PM
Tim, CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Love that ending! Janice
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/27/2019 3:56:00 PM
Thank you Janice
Date: 7/26/2019 1:02:00 AM
Most witty, loved the truth revealing, so clever, Tim - you got my grin! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/26/2019 1:41:00 AM
Thank you CayCay!
Date: 7/9/2019 9:41:00 PM
Awesome take on the challenge, Timothy. Most endearing.
Login to Reply
McGuire Avatar
Timothy McGuire
Date: 7/9/2019 10:46:00 PM
Thank you Line. Ill send you a note on this one.