The Old Jalopy

That jalopy is still puttin' along
Slow start on cold mornings
Loud stinky foul exhaust
And the finish is quite weathered

His seat is lumpy
He uses a lot of fuel
Not as fast anymore
And has a screw loose somewhere

But she tells her girlfriends
She still loves her husband
After forty two years
Even if he's not the man he used to be

The Old Jalopy Poetry Contest
7/9/19

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 7/28/2019 7:05:00 AM
Nice one Tim. Good vibes...Congratulations on your placement.
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/28/2019 7:16:00 AM
Thanks Charles
Date: 7/28/2019 6:56:00 AM
Made me smile Tim - we, ourselves, become those old jalopies - still loved we pray
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/28/2019 7:15:00 AM
You are right craig!
Date: 7/28/2019 12:11:00 AM
I wasn't expecting your ending Tim. I loved the metaphors and being taken by surprise! Congratulations on your deserving win! : )
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/28/2019 12:31:00 AM
Thank you Miss Connie
Date: 7/27/2019 9:41:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on a most deserving win, Timothy.
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/28/2019 12:32:00 AM
Thank you Miss Line
Date: 7/27/2019 6:14:00 PM
Love the comparison! Congratulations, Timothy!
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/27/2019 6:24:00 PM
Thank you Kim
Date: 7/27/2019 3:36:00 PM
Tim, CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Love that ending! Janice
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/27/2019 3:56:00 PM
Thank you Janice
Date: 7/26/2019 1:02:00 AM
Most witty, loved the truth revealing, so clever, Tim - you got my grin! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/26/2019 1:41:00 AM
Thank you CayCay!
Date: 7/9/2019 9:41:00 PM
Awesome take on the challenge, Timothy. Most endearing.
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/9/2019 10:46:00 PM
Thank you Line. Ill send you a note on this one.
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