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Author's Notes: "The Old Dark House" is a narrative poem that I had co-authored in collaboration and direct coordination with my colleagues and dear friends, Anne-Lise Andresen and Liam McDaid. (This poem was completed on September 7, 2016.) The fictional-fantasy story behind this particular poem speaks for itself. It follows the same fantasy-horror theme genre similar to the narrative poem that all three of us collaborated on last month: "The Demon's Shrill Cry of Dread and Horror." I guess that you, the reader, can consider both of these poems as early contributions from all three of us for Halloween (or All Hallows' Eve) 2016, which is nearly now upon us. This write, like our last one from August, delves into the "psychology of the mind" when its confronted at the subconscious-level by the true force of evil and bad intentions from Lucifer. This is also in line with the historical and biblical role traditionally that has been attributed to Lucifer as the "ultimate tempter of mankind." In a fantasy-metaphysical-ethereal sense, we likened "The Old Dark House" to an "evil dream" at the subconscious-level which can be easily conjured by the innocent and uninformed (in this case principally children) as the month of October approaches with the advent of All Hallows' Eve on October 31. I know that Anne-Lise, Liam, and I think that you shall find this particular theme and narrative story to be of interest. I know also that all three of us were quite pleased with how the final version of our narrative poem turned out here. And so, "Happy Halloween" from Anne-Lise, Liam, and me! (And Remember: "Dare not to be one of the innocent and uninformed who conjureth The Old Dark House in your dreams." "If so, the Demons of Hell shall come for your very soul!") (Gary Bateman - September 9, 2016) (Narrative)

A Special Note for Arthur Vaso: "The Brothers and Sister Grimm have struck again!!" BOO!! BOO!! 

Categories: dark, dream, evil, fantasy, god, metaphor, and symbolism. 

The Old Dark House This tale of “The Old Dark House” is one that’s replete with a most horrid sense of pure evil and macabre, and is worth being retold each year during the deep-dark hours of All Hallows’ Eve before the chime of midnight, when the thin veil separating the land of the living and the dead momentarily dissolves, bringing both worlds together until the break of dawn. Beware of this house’s mythical and ethereal presence in the shadow dreams of the innocent, and be forewarned to never conjure its image in your unconscious mind. If so conjured, The Old Dark House shall become an unending reality to the innocent and uninformed, and on All Hallows’ Eve, the evil “Demons of Hell” shall come for your very soul! The Old Dark House is one that is bathed and cursed in utter hellfire and damnation by Lucifer himself. It’s one that creeps a chill and frozen reminder into the very frame of its nasty, putrid structure. It shall guarantee you the worst possible nightmares as your very soul cries in agony and pleads unrelentingly for mercy! Your nightmares are, in turn, amplified and born into the very structure of this house with ivy creeping as you palpably sense the wretched ice-cold fingers of Hell opening the doors to the cavernous basement were evil shadows of goblins, ghosts, ghouls, vampires, and werewolves parade openly from past lives. Everyone suffering the curse of the damned was captured here when they visited, becoming prisoners to the darkness of true evil, far away from the light, goodness, and eternal mercy of Almighty God Himself. Six generations of my family actually dwelled beneath the rafters of The Old Dark House where demonic forces were constantly in play—as hot sparks burned the tongues of lost souls who cried in agony, and their world would enter the vortex of darkness whilst blood-curdling screams could be distinctly heard during the night on All Hallows’ Eve. Ghostly images would appear out of nowhere supported by the frightening ferocity of Lucifer who is the true dark presence and ultimate tempter of mankind! The horror I felt as a young boy trapped in this existence is truly unimaginable. The image of The Old Dark House still haunts my adult consciousness, even today, as I would shudder in the cold night-sweat of sleep to purge its eternal presence from my mind! Cruel pictures adorn the hell-hole hall of imagination as a gruesome and unbelievable power underneath wields its vice-grip of hideous words, whispering in the coldest of ice without the living being able to breathe in a cloud of mercy and forgiveness, within an ancient language of evil and evil-doings that twist the shape of words to suit one’s human fears and cold shivers! I still don’t understand the full measure of things being lost in this dark pit of Hell in The Old Dark House. It’s a place that’s devoid of human meaning and worth as shrunken heads are disembodied! I hold on to what remains of a past shame, hovering high in the air as unclean spirits of a crooked vision-circle wander aimlessly as a Blind Sheppard leads our lost souls to the depressing Dark Land of Nowhere and Nothingness! Every October as the full moon rises high in the dark-sky evening, a ritual fire is set by a local coven of witches to celebrate the advent of All Hallows’ Eve. These witches know well the power and evil of The Old Dark House. Their burnt offerings and black magic spells echo hauntingly as Hell’s own fury is unearthed, challenging all things virtuous in mankind’s existence and in God’s world of beauty, hope, kindness, and light. These evil images of black magic and witchcraft haunted my sleep entire. I couldn’t sleep at all before dawn. I constantly sense now an awakening madness in my soul, as if it comes from hidden graves yet to be uncovered. Images and bad memories of The Old Dark House push me now toward the opening of unknown tombs. I can actually now smell Death’s Sulphur-burnt flesh! Doors begin to rustle behind me as I hear loud footsteps of a pin echoing deep in my mind. The echo shatters any illusions I have of human sanity and forgiveness. I feel the sheer horror and begin suffocating as the stale air is trapped in each breath I take! I sit up now—immediately confused, looking directly at a lonely and empty Black Void that goes on and on and on—to infinity! Cell doors in the house basement were always closed tight with rusted iron links bound by heavy chains. As a poor child alone in this house with other condemned children, there were nice rooms upstairs that were always barred and shut to us as we suffered in the filthy basement below. In Lucifer’s Hell! I recall now too, in my memory, a gallery of special portraits in The Old Dark House, which formed a ghastly mosaic of pure evil. These portraits were of key human disciples of Lucifer who had served him well through the ages. All of these images were grotesque and evil when taken as a whole. What did I learn? Evil is what Evil is! And Evil does what Evil does! I’m free now from the eternal curse of The Old Dark House. I escaped this mansion of the macabre as a young man and found my soul path to Almighty God and stepped into His holy light of forgiveness and redemption! As a very old man now, I sleep and dream a lot. Usually my dreams, thank goodness, are pleasant as I draw toward the end of my mortal existence here on earth. Yet, despite all the good things in my life now, during October of each year, as All Hallows’ Eve cometh closer in the deep recesses of my mind—I remember clearly that the ground floor of The Old Dark House always had these frigid-cold wind gusts that spoke chillingly to one’s very soul. As young kids we would run upstairs in this evil house to hear the “Demons of the Night” moan and cry! Old Hob always had a way to speak to all of us as kids in His House! Anne-Lise Andresen, Liam McDaid, and Gary Bateman A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved September 7, 2016 (Narrative)

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Date: 10/22/2016 1:02:00 PM
Hi Gary, I know it's been awhile since a visiting you. But I don't know how I missed this awesome collaboration. You all work so well together. This was a well executed dark write. It was creepy and spooky. I must say I was a bit terrified reading it. The imagery was outstanding. I could just picture dark hideous creatures in my minds eye. This is without a doubt Seven.Also I would like to say congratulations to you all for getting the poem of the week:-) Alexis
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Gary Bateman
Date: 10/22/2016 3:21:00 PM
Thanks so much Alexis!! I've actually been a way for the last few weeks. Just posted two new poems today. I will be off and on with Poetry Soup from time-to-time until I get my prose writes finished for my second book planned for release this next year. I know that Anne-Lise and Liam would be very pleased too by your comments on "The Old Dark House." I plan to read more of your poems too!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 10/6/2016 8:52:00 AM
Lovely. The words do creep upon the reader, their cold, damp meaning stinging the eyes and chilling the soul. Well penned.
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Date: 10/7/2016 3:40:00 PM
Thanks Scott -- on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me!! We all worked a bit on this one to get it just right. Very Glad that you liked it!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 10/6/2016 12:23:00 AM
How did I miss this? Sometimes when I see a long poem, I return when I can truly read it, with full attention and enjoy it! Again you all outshine, I loved it and yes I loved the wee comment! For poems as this, I actually print them out, as for some reason I find reading long poems more enjoyable on paper! ( a hint to others)
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Date: 10/7/2016 4:01:00 PM
Hello Arthur, Glad to see that you finally got to this one!! You're the one who gave all three of us "The Brothers and Sister Grimm" moniker for these particular co-writes. I know that you certainly captured our mutual attention with this special title!! You really got Anne-Lise's attention in particular!! (I like to read the longer poems too on paper.) The Brothers and Sister Grimm will have more gems like this one in the future. All The Best Arthur, Gary
Date: 9/24/2016 11:21:00 PM
Hi Gary, I'm amazed by your narrative write. Really, really impressed. Love the darkness OCT has to bring, on any day. LINDA
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Date: 9/25/2016 5:21:00 PM
Hello Dear Linda!! Always a big treat to hear from you!! I believe "We Libras" are all coming up for birthdays during October -- if my memory serves me correctly from last year with you and SKAT!! It pleases me greatly that you liked our co-authored narrative poem here. (BTW, my second book should be ready by next Summer 2017. This one will be a novella with an assortment of short stories. I have more poetry planned for a third book later on.) Continued Best Wishes . . . And Beware . . . Halloween is Coming Soon!! Gary!!
Date: 9/17/2016 11:18:00 AM
A most deserving POTW honoree. Congratulations to all of you on such a great collaborative effort. I'm always amazed at how these things come together with more than one poet. Who goes first?
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Date: 9/18/2016 9:12:00 AM
Hello Charlie, Many Thanks for your gracious words on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me!! I would like to say to you that the secret is "magic," but actually, it's a shared effort among three people who know each other and work together very well. And it's a lot of work in the end to get a smooth, synergized outcome. Without a blended effort any narrative of this scope and magnitude wouldn't be a quality effort in the end. It takes some time to do this. Best!! Gary
Date: 9/15/2016 2:36:00 PM
Congratulations Gary, Anne-Lise and Liam on POTW. A well deserved win. I just love horror stories and this has just amped me up for Halloween. I agree with Jerry, I love the Author's notes as much as the write, but I have always been a fan of you three. Thank you for an awesome read and scare. A (7) for me and a fav. Sharon
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Date: 9/17/2016 7:32:00 AM
Thanks Dear Sharon on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me!! Thanks for the SEVEN/FAV!! I really appreciate your gracious comments. Glad to see you like horror stories. (I have several of them, to include my novella in my second book which is still under development.) The Author's Notes are provided to give the reader a backstory concerning each write. They serve as a historical record too for me as I archive my writings.) Beware . . . Halloween is just around the corner!! BOO!! Gary
Date: 9/15/2016 6:39:00 AM
A good one Gary. One for the connoisseurs of horror well written. Regards David in NZ.
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Date: 9/15/2016 8:19:00 AM
Hello David, And many thanks to you for your read and comment here on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me!! You might also want to check out: "The Demon's Shrill Cry of Dread and Horror" that I posted last month. (Anne-Lise just posted it again this month since it's a co-write.) It's one too that highlights the "shadows of the macabre" to the reader!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 9/15/2016 6:21:00 AM
I've said it before and I have to say it again--I love the author's notes as much as the written piece......God Bless
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Date: 9/15/2016 8:13:00 AM
Thanks so much Jerry!! I'm pleased that you liked the Author's Notes and the poem together. (Just so you know, by next Summer my second book should be ready for publication. This new book is prose -- a novella and a collection of short stories. I keep the tradition there too of having an Author's Note after each story. I do this to explain key nuances of piece I write.) Again, thanks for your read -- and continued best wishes to you!! Cheers, Gary
Date: 9/15/2016 1:54:00 AM
A great collaboration to remember with this POTW! Congratulations to all of you! 7 ; )
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:59:00 AM
Hello Connie, Great hearing from you!! Many Thanks on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me. And thanks too for the "7." We kind of went all-out on this one. I need to check out your poetry too. Hope all is well. (I busy working now on my second book for publication this next year.) Best Always, Gary
Date: 9/14/2016 10:03:00 PM
Amazing. Puts me in the mood for Halloween.
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:55:00 AM
Hello Stark!! We have another dark one that three of us collaborated on from last month that you might be interested in as well: "The Demon's Shrill Cry of Dread and Horror." I posted it first last month, and then Anne-Lise followed up with a posting of it for this month. Halloween shall soon be upon us!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 9/14/2016 12:48:00 PM
Well done. And as a collaborative its the best. Congrats on your POTW.
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:51:00 AM
Thanks Marilyn for your very kind words on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me. Halloween's just around the corner! Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 9/12/2016 3:30:00 PM
Wow! What a wonderful collaboration from all of you! Congratulations on POTW! : ) 7
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Date: 9/13/2016 3:01:00 PM
Thanks for your great note here Connie on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me. I know that we're all pleased that you liked it!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 9/12/2016 6:50:00 AM
Another wonderful collaboration; congrats on POTW!!!
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Date: 9/13/2016 3:04:00 PM
Thanks Phil always for your kind words and support. I know that Anne-Lise and Liam are greatly appreciative as well. Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 9/12/2016 5:56:00 AM
congratulations on poem of the week smiling gary and anne lise this was truly a pleasure to read again got the mind spiralling into a dark realm thank you ever so deeply wishing you a blessing of a week pal
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Date: 9/13/2016 3:10:00 PM
Hello Liam-Mate!! Thanks as always for your thoughts and in-depth insights on helping to craft some great metaphors and descriptive word-sense imagery. It's always great to be able to work with you and Anne-Lise on poems with superb themes and powerful storylines. Good-On-You Always, My Dear Friend!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 9/11/2016 9:45:00 PM
Holy smokes!!! What a great poem! That was scary...perfect for Halloween approaching! What a talent you have to convey such deep emotion to the readers! Your imagination...Wow!!
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Date: 9/13/2016 3:14:00 PM
Thank you Dear Chelcie for your really nice and supportive comments here about "The Old Dark House." Yup, this one is a Halloween poem. And all three of us, had a similar poem posted last month under the title: "The Demon's Shrill Cry of Dread and Horror." You might like it as well. Best Always, Gary
Date: 9/11/2016 10:05:00 AM
Hi Gary Liam and Anne- Lise!:)) Wow! Congratulations to all the three of you on POTW!A very outstanding collaboration you've created here again my dearest friends.So very beautifully written.Just awesome!All the three of you deserve this great honor.I' m just so very happy for all of you.Well done! Just amazing! Enjoy your whole POTW week!:)Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light God bless you always!:))Love n' hugs!xoxox D ^O^
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Date: 9/11/2016 10:30:00 AM
Hello Dear "D"!! Always great hearing from you -- and in this case -- again on "The Old Dark House." Ingrid always likes my emphasis on love poetry and the ethereal and metaphysical stuff. But when I'm around Liam and Anne-Lise, one dark idea leads to another . . . what can I say?? Thanks again on the mutual recognition of the work by all three of us on this particular effort. Much work, but much fun too on this one!! Continued Best Wishes . . . "G"
Date: 9/11/2016 7:22:00 AM
Hello again Gary. Congratulations on POTW:) I told you more honors would follow:):)
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Date: 9/11/2016 9:53:00 AM
Thanks so much Daniel on behalf of Anne-Lise, Liam, and me!! (I was actually away yesterday and not online, and had no idea our co-write had made POTW). Thanks too, for your most gracious comments!! Best Always, Gary (P.S. I must get by to check out your poetry too.)
Date: 9/11/2016 5:20:00 AM
- CONGRATULATIONS P.O.T.W. !!! ...... HOORAY !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/11/2016 10:02:00 AM
Thanks Dear Anne-Lise. This one could not have happened without the mutual team effort of all three of us: You, Liam, and me!! (Don't forget -- you and Liam must get this one posted later again during Halloween. This one bears repeating for sure!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 9/9/2016 6:55:00 PM
First let me say, seldom do I read lengthy writes, having said that, I read the story and I enjoyed it. Certainly wouldn't want to live there or be anywhere near it come Halloween. Witches are a ghastly lot. I am rather well acquainted with demons, as I fight them regularly. Thank you Anne Lise, Liam and Gary for a most entertaining read. I expect more honors to follow! Sorry Gary, ladies first:)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/11/2016 10:31:00 AM
Many Thanks Again Daniel!! Best Always, Gary
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Sunshine Smile
Date: 9/10/2016 7:15:00 AM
- Thanks, Daniel :)))
Date: 9/9/2016 10:39:00 AM
smiling gary reading the notes grimm is the shadow we hide under your pen flowed golden within the darkness a great pleasure writing this with you both i tip my hat it turned out a powerful piece
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/11/2016 10:04:00 AM
Thanks Liam Mate!! This one, just like the last one, turned out extraordinarily well. A Great Team effort and approach for sure. Continued Best Wishes . . . Gary (P.S. "Spill Ink")
Date: 9/9/2016 8:31:00 AM
Hi Gary, Liam and Anne-Lise! This is very evil and outstanding horror tale that you've painted here my dearest friends.Excellent poem!Very dark but beautifully written as always.Again this is another scary piece that could be just the perfect Halloween poem too :) Great imagery!Wonderful collaborations!Just awesome!Your pens are mighty golden!A 7 to each!A Fav!Wishing you a very lovely weekend!In His light God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D ^O^
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Date: 9/10/2016 7:15:00 AM
- Thanks, Dorian :)
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:43:00 AM
Thanks so much Dear One "D"!! And thanks too for the 7/FAV. I know that all three of us are quite proud of this narrative write. Our mutual best Halloween Wishes to you and I know we're glad that you enjoyed this dark piece. Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 9/9/2016 4:26:00 AM
- Although I have read this several times, it is still a horror and devilish story !!!! - Thank you Gary and Liam !! - A prima write, that we can all be proud of! - Nightmare or not ... I hope many will enjoy this story - Best wishes and hugs Sister Grimm :)
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:50:00 AM
Thanks Sister Grimm!! The Brothers Grimm embrace you in our open arms. (Just don't have an deep-dreams of "The Old Dark House.) The thoughts and twists and turns of this complex write definitely needed all three of us to make it happen!! Best Always, Gary