Kim Rodrigues Poet Sijo

The Oceans Deed

THE OCEAN’S DEED

Rushing waters of natural pool
cascade onto my head.

Better half's off to grab camera —
shot he’ll take when I’m dead.

The ocean’s deed to push me under
amuse the man I’ve wed.

7/25/2020


7/25/2020
Modern Sijo
Total of 45 syllables

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Aditi Mishra July 28, 2020 at 12:50 PM This one is so witty Kim. I've experienced this once so now I maintain my distance. Congratulations on your win! Kim Rodrigues July 28, 2020 at 6:19 PM LOL! I’ve had two encounters! Thank you!

Caren Krutsinger July 28, 2020 at 5:09 AM I have to tell you this one caused me anxiety; I have nearly drowned and it is an unpleasant feeling. Kim Rodrigues July 28, 2020 at 6:19 PM Yikes! Hugs.

Jennifer Proxenos July 26, 2020 at 12:01 AM I never go too deep into the sea, but I agree with you although great fun, never turn your back on it. Lovely poem Kim. Blessings, Jennifer. Kim Rodrigues July 26, 2020 at 3:52 AM This really happened...lol. I watched a father and his daughter under the cascade of water. So I decided to go under and indeed I did as it pushed me under. My sunglasses which were on the top of my head, were pushed onto my face such that my nose was bruised. Crazy!

Michelle Faulkner July 25, 2020 at 4:48 PM The ocean can play rough sometimes - sounds like a fun excursion, though! Kim Rodrigues July 25, 2020 at 4:52 PM Oh it was! As the saying goes - never turn your back on the ocean. Playful for sure.