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The Nobodies

We are the nobodies Unloved, un-hated, un-phased Outcasts of the world of popularity. Banished to the fringes of existence. Finding joy- is a rarity- no solidarity Always seen at a distance- because we are the resistance Nameless faceless and speechless- When we speak the response is an echo Bouncing around in a black hole We can't hide from it so lets go Into the darkness of our abandoned soul Alone, lost, and shrouded by darkness left to face the shadows of heaven Lost in life- Our suffering is endless! To each other we are brethren. We are numbed by pain And blinded by shame we are social life's bane playing popularity's game We are the nobodies...

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/24/2013 8:59:00 PM

Erik, Congratulations!!! Thank you for the wonderful win. :-) Epic, it is. <3 always & forever <3 ''LINDA

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/25/2012 11:39:00 AM

I don't think that you are among the nobodies for you show talent..Sara

Erik Burciaga
Date: 11/6/2012 9:38:00 PM

Thank you but I was using that term as in social stature and popularity rather than having a skill or talent.

Annie Lander

Date: 10/24/2012 12:47:00 PM

love this lines..... Alone, lost, and shrouded by darkness left to face the shadows of heaven Lost in life- Our suffering is endless! To each other we are brethren.

Erik Burciaga
Date: 11/6/2012 9:40:00 PM

Thank you. I actually wrote this piece a few years back. I found it in my closet so I edited it to help smooth out the edges, and I felt these rhymes helped it progress more smoothly.

Annie Lander
Date: 10/24/2012 12:49:00 PM

Sometimes it better to let the poem flow without tryin to force the rhyme. however, you seem to make it work for you with this piece..

Erik Burciaga

Date: 10/23/2012 10:47:00 AM

I was hoping for a better response... get some critique you know? So if you have any ideas on improving it just leave a comment.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/16/2012 1:30:00 PM

A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you today Erik. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. Hoping you find even more inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Love, Carol

Erik Burciaga
Date: 11/6/2012 9:45:00 PM

Thank you very much. I'm glad to be here where poetry can be respected rather than poked at for a laugh. I hope to add more pieces soon but school takes up a lot of my time. So thanks again for the warm welcome and I hope to hone my skills as a writer with the help of fellow poets.