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The Narrow Ravine

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It was gentle enough for a chasm or aperture, A vast hollow place where peace resonated. When we finished, the views were saturated. Its roar ruins us, wiping all sight of the reckoner. In a serene atmosphere, all noises are muted. Once again, our voices would be audible. Some question the level at which it is visible. We huddled on wooden benches as rooted. Pals view it from a side as if they were alone. refusing to shake hands or utter a tender word. Relish the view of the clouds and jade birds. The dove partner was positioned prone. Yielded to the settings but vowed to return. She seduces herself by gazing at the sky sublime. She fidgeted with her hair from time to time. Ignite the candle until it gets murky, and let it burn...
Written: October 21, 2022

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Date: 10/22/2022 1:51:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this creative one. I like the internal rhyme scheme that you used. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 10/22/2022 10:54:00 AM
Beautiful moments are captured well in this verse's arresting images. Lovely picture, too. :)
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Date: 10/22/2022 6:04:00 AM
Your verses echo beautifully from the ravine. Well done my friend.
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Date: 10/21/2022 10:47:00 PM
Delightful enclosed rhyme. There might be some pleasure enjoying the silence of the ravine.
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Date: 10/21/2022 9:32:00 PM
Lost in Nature's serene calm and enticing beauty, even refusing to talk. Yes, some scenes are so alluring, that we forget ourselves ! Lovely descriptions !
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