The Mystery Letter - a Collaberation - Part 1

I saw her walking in the park alone and lost in her thoughts 
it's as if the world around her froze and blew away from grace
her hollowed cheeks sang the litany of sorrow more precise 
than a knife at the cutting edge of death.  Her crimson gown 
was soiled with tears and I longed to mend the tear 
that pierced her baby flesh.  She had matted hair of dark
and was clearly in a bout of depression.  It clung to her
like a London ferry fog on a morning tramway ride. 
I stirred the wind for her as she stooped to read a letter.
Fingers loosed and the letter flew- released, like a paper kerchief. 
Poof!  it went, out between the trees, tucking itself beneath a rock.
There it lay immobile waiting for human hands to find.
"What's an angel to do?" so I did the only thing an angel could.
I swooped down retrieved the letter and answered it.  Perhaps to 
alleviate her misery, perhaps not.  Either way I was going to remove 
those grenades from her delusive mind.


Words by Mystic Rose

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 6/10/2016 9:50:00 PM
Wow, the story thus far has me mesmerized. Each word seems so carefully placed to serve its intended purpose. I was going to say that this seems like a different writing style coming from you, Laura, but then I read the note at the bottom! Off to part 2!
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Date: 6/10/2016 11:28:00 PM
Yes, it is her distinctive style. I particularly liked her line, "like a London ferry fog on a morning tramway ride"..such a talented poetess. I was blessed to collab with her. Thanks for reading. <3~Laura
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