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The Moldy Closet

The cloak closet was fairly clean A brief dust would do it Then pouring rain set in two days Leaving white walls unfit Now the closet isn't sparkling clean From those down stream's dribbles On the clean outside all looks well Inside black ink scribbles A hard untidy job ahead Removing the contents A stinky, stressful employment Arduousness presents All purpose cleaner in strong hands Spray, scrub to beat the band Unsuccessful accomplishment Step back, look, the job scanned Momma said soap and water cleaned Anything but the soul But when cleaning problem items Doubt settles, loose control Then within my spirit a voice Bubbles a joyful toll Just say a prayer for cleansing And He will make one whole Finis'

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/12/2015 12:26:00 PM
So there is life after cleaning.
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Date: 12/26/2014 10:16:00 PM
SARA, Awesome Best of 2014 poem, and win.... Congrats.... Linda
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Date: 12/19/2014 11:27:00 AM
Hi Sarah, A very enjoyable poem. I see why you chose this one. Congratulations on an excellent win. Earl
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Date: 12/18/2014 5:50:00 AM
A great poem, nicely done, Sara, congratulations on the win
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Date: 12/17/2014 2:54:00 PM
Oh I'm so pleased you finished this and entered it to the contest - love the spiritual ending:-) Congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/7/2014 1:52:00 AM
glad you finished it Sara well penned hugs
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Date: 12/5/2014 5:29:00 AM
finish it Sara it promises to be a great poem love it so far hugs
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Date: 12/5/2014 1:34:00 AM
The depth of this poem is amazing; what a piece to ponder. Closets hold so many secrets, good and bad; rain does not discriminate.
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Date: 12/1/2014 12:56:00 PM
incredible lines that somehow speak of cleaning closets, maybe from a symbolic point of view.. looking forward to the final piece, sara.. huggs
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Date: 12/1/2014 12:24:00 PM
I found this quite dark Sara i would love to see how the story pans out:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 12/1/2014 11:48:00 AM
Old man water is not a kind visitor . . . and he cannot be ignored -- at least not very long . . . . it least he inspired you to write a beautiful poem . . . loved that last line in first stanza!! Here's to a clean closet.
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