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God named me a straying cloud,
and by His perpetual wish I abide...
as the loneliest cloud floating on the earth's breeze.
I glance below and discover the yellow daffodils pride, 
and fluttering they dance beneath the apple trees;
and as a sparrow I feel the bond. 

My night visitation is more exciting than broad daylight,
I encounter many stars and make them my friends,
and they love shining on the Milky Way...
looking down on the lonely bay so bright;
and tossing their luminous heads, they brightly dance:
so happy they have come my way!

Even the ocean's waves join them in their play,
but their dance is better than theirs,
and at such wondrous sight I make verse...
being offered their warm company;
I am amazed by how they roll and still gazing away,
I do admire the spectacle that gladdens me.

So often, on my couch I gladly lie to rest,
but overwhelmed by empty or moody thoughts,
that splendid image flashes in the glow of the sunset;
my daffodils still wave and invite me to dance,
and I dance with them, making a happy sound...
not to feel the loneliness of a lost cloud. 

Entered in Brian Strand's Adaption poetry contest
This is an adaption of Williams Wordsworth's poem,
"I wandered lonely as a cloud"

Copyright 2009 by Andrew Crisci

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Date: 11/10/2009 11:50:00 PM
Congrats on your success in Michael's contest Andrew.Rgds Brian
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Date: 11/10/2009 11:27:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest Andrew.Rgds Brian
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Date: 11/10/2009 11:54:00 AM
What an awesome beautiful piece. The imagery is perfect. An excellent write. I too want the daffodils to wave and invite me to dance. Loved this write God Bless Phyl
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Date: 11/10/2009 10:47:00 AM
Awesome! Description, imagery, word choices, concept, absolutely gorgeous. I am inspired. Good luck on the contest, should have no trouble winning at all in my opinion. A fav. for me. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.
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Date: 11/10/2009 9:22:00 AM
This is absolutely amazing and it couldn't have come at a better time for me because I needed to read something powerful like this to lift me up and make me smile again.I am surprised that no one has critiqued this one because it is like a bright light that shines through the darkness.and I am going to walk away and go outside and smell the fresh aroma of flowers blowing through the wind and maybe even have the opportunity to catch a hummingbird fly by to wish me a wonderful day.Thank you,Dean
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