The Little Brown Moth and Me

wings beating frantically
against the shower window,
wasting an entire existence
denied by an invisible wall
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Liwayway Avatar
March 20, 2013 at 10:58 AM
very awesome write my friend Tim, you make me smile after reading your poem before I sleep today. Congratulations on your win.. Hugs, Maria :)
Jones Avatar
March 20, 2013 at 7:55 AM
Congratulations on your win Tim....Donna
Richards Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 8:56 AM
Nothing worse than a moth with wet wings!! Unless it's a fly in your soup!
Roberts Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 7:21 AM
awww sorry moth ...splatttt... Seren
A   Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 6:44 PM
Hi Tim Congratulations :-) with your nice and wonderful winning free verse poem~ Always & Forever* PD
Hicks Avatar
March 12, 2013 at 10:39 AM
Wow Tim this was cool! I could really sympathize with that poor moths struggle and the very vivid description in the first four lines. Living so short a life only to be denied by an invisible wall... there is definitely something to be learned from that even in real human life!
Bolden Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 7:56 AM
very nice
Eastman Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 7:04 AM
Interesting write... Poor little guy... But he's better off to not get there.
Andresen Avatar
February 23, 2013 at 1:24 PM
.... not unknown Tim, really written in a nice way - Wishing you a wonderful weekend. -oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Bauer Avatar
February 23, 2013 at 6:12 AM
nice one! love the end of the first verse especially...
Jones Avatar
February 22, 2013 at 6:36 PM
This is how I feel sometimes...very complex....
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