The Last Master of War

Not a true Choka...but uses a 5,7,7,5,7,7 format 
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Chill, steaming vapour;           
Silence over pale water;           
Faded, thin wisps of ribboned 
 Pink                              
Above the east gate;                    
I dip oars...and silence 
  Breaks.                          
Trace of flame in lilac sky.       

Raise, lean, dip and pull;         
Sculling forward little
 Twirls                            
Swirl away from dripping 
  Blades;                        
Uplifted soul -- soaring!                           
Remembering how, when young...     
Each new day would bring                     
 New hope.                                   

Extends the shoreline --           
Sweeping inwards at the
 Point;                            
Green bulrushes in the bay;            
A bittern booming:-               
Rising up like slow thunder              
  Drifting out of jade mountains.         

My busied childhood,                   
Hidden pate not yet shaven;                         
Shrimping with a fine mesh 
 Net;                            
Loud, boyish laughter;                                                                      
Brimming jars crammed with 
  Sunbeams --                                                            
The golden, darting minnows.

Horizon widens,                    
Shadow retreats from low
 Hills;                            
Gathering orb comforts me;                                      
Selfsame warm comfort              
  When held by sleepy women          
 In cold grey of early dawn.        

The vaguest murmur,                 
Faint as drowsy breathe, 
Of the soundings of dim chimes...  
A call to prayer?                  
Hands hard-clenched on the
 Staid oars;            
Restrained by yesteryear.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 7/2/2020 10:22:00 PM
Wow John your words are seductive! Lol but I never doubted you could seduce with words! Haha I know for a fact!;)
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Date: 8/26/2020 8:26:00 AM
Why thank you, Poetess...your words of encouragement are a constant pleasure to me. :) john
Date: 6/27/2020 6:50:00 PM
John, this is a real beauty of images as penned with exactitude capturing it clearing and tenderly. 5 star! a fav
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Date: 8/30/2020 3:17:00 AM
Thank you, Jeanne! And my apologies for the long delay in replying...so very, very busy of late. A great pleasure to make your acquaintance - cheers! :) john
Date: 6/27/2020 6:10:00 PM
I feel like I can smell the salt water as I read this one.
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