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The Lass From Sassafras

There was a sweet lass from Sassafras
Who each morn rode a large burrow to class
          But once after school
          Near killed a fellow pupil
Who remarked on the size of her ass!

Copyright © Keith Baker | Year Posted 2011

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Glenda Smith Date: 4/21/2019 3:24:00 PM "Near killed a darned fool" would fit? Kudos, a fellow author, Sassy Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 9/6/2011 8:55:00 AM that is killing words.....never speak of size....even though it does matter!! hehe Login to Reply

Nick Bagnall Date: 9/6/2011 7:33:00 AM Funny limerick, constructive critisism, the flow is an important part of a limerick, it's easier to read if lines 1, 2 & 5 have matching syllable count, the same applies to lines 3 & 4, when the lines get too long, you loose the freshness. try "Who remarked" at the start of the last line, do you see what I mean ? Login to Reply Keith Baker Date: 9/6/2011 12:28:00 PM I considered that and the original fourth line was "young fool" to shorten the syllable count but I decided that I wanted to use certain words like "only crime" and "pupil" and count be damned. Now that isn't to say I haven't been rereading it and trying to figure out how to chop a few here and there but as of right now I'm happy with it. But thanks for the reply, check it out in a week or so and there will probably be changes.