Home » Poems » Keith Baker » The Lass From Sassafras

The Lass From Sassafras

There was a sweet lass from Sassafras
Who each morn rode a large burrow to class
          But once after school
          Near killed a fellow pupil
Who remarked on the size of her ass!

funnylimerick

♡Like0

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Glenda Smith

April 21, 2019 at 3:24 PM

"Near killed a darned fool" would fit? Kudos, a fellow author, Sassy

Doris Culverhouse

September 6, 2011 at 8:55 AM

that is killing words.....never speak of size....even though it does matter!! hehe

Nick Bagnall

September 6, 2011 at 7:33 AM

Funny limerick, constructive critisism, the flow is an important part of a limerick, it's easier to read if lines 1, 2 & 5 have matching syllable count, the same applies to lines 3 & 4, when the lines get too long, you loose the freshness. try "Who remarked" at the start of the last line, do you see what I mean ?

Keith Baker

September 6, 2011 at 12:28 PM

I considered that and the original fourth line was "young fool" to shorten the syllable count but I decided that I wanted to use certain words like "only crime" and "pupil" and count be damned. Now that isn't to say I haven't been rereading it and trying to figure out how to chop a few here and there but as of right now I'm happy with it. But thanks for the reply, check it out in a week or so and there will probably be changes.

The Lass From Sassafras

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment

Member Area

Soup Social

Member Poems

Member Poets

Famous Poems

Famous Poets

Poetry Resources