The Irritable Chest Cold

The sun had risen but could not be seen. 
Still daylight was welcome in her studio.
She stood hunched with pain over her easel.
The landscape was not quite what she wanted.
She had decided to portray the joys of nature,
Lovely cerulean firmament with hazy clouds
Hovering in the background just beneath and around
The majestic mountains of her new abode.

Stately trees dotted the countryside and 
Intermixed with cosy cabins, smoke curling
Into the sky because it was a cold and humid place.
Even inside her cabin, the air was irritating.
Outside, the continual grey rain would not stop.
She felt cold and coughed a lot, as well as chest congestion.
Darn, raining cats and mice today!  She felt confused.
Cats and mice?  Or dogs?  What did it matter,
Once the foul inclement weather would not change?

to be concluded

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Date: 12/10/2024 7:38:00 PM
The artist with her determination to paint a picturesque scene on the canvas, despite her physical discomfiture is a symbol of perseverance. The inclement weather outside is distressing to her. She wishes if the rain stops, so that she can copy the beautiful landscape outside which will be visible only if the sky clears. Victor, you find new stories everyday which are so captivating.
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Date: 12/7/2024 10:57:00 PM
Dear Victor your poem, beautifully contrasts the artist’s inner vision with the dreary outer world. The playful "raining cats and mice" adds humor, showcasing creativity’s resilience despite discomfort and struggle. I see that there's a second part, will go and see...Hugs
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Date: 12/5/2024 10:15:00 PM
I loved reading your relatable, lovely story, Victor. We've all had days like that. No wonder she had trouble capturing the joys of nature! A great tale. :)
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Date: 12/5/2024 2:55:00 AM
- When the weather is bad and you don't feel well, it's not easy to find inspiration ... great written, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 12/4/2024 10:41:00 PM
enjoyed the images and message, health is the most precious thing to matter, thanks poet
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Date: 12/4/2024 6:43:00 PM
Hmmm...interesting. Looking for part 2 :)
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Date: 12/4/2024 3:48:00 PM
I know how she feels, I’m suffering the irritable chest cold, can’t shake it off. Enjoyed the read… Beryl
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Date: 12/4/2024 11:52:00 AM
I enjoyed reading part one of your write. Looking forward to part 2.... Have fun day writing away............
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