Notes About The Poem

The Introverted Mood of Night

I sat in languid candle light                         
as water poured outside                               
and lightning flashed, defied 
the introverted mood of night. 
   
From flash to flash my roaming mind
the realms of love traversed;                           
my thoughts like bubbles burst                         
pinched in the bud, left undefined.
   
Yet effervescence would not cease                  
I knew that up till dawn                 
the need for you would spawn –     
A constant tease without release.

Each image brought a burning ache.
The yearning would not sleep  
but thundered in the deep.  
My body trembled in its wake. 
 
Remembered touches of your hand  
tormenting naked skin  
the veil between us thin  
your pilgrim lips on sacred land.  
 
In endless night, your presence near
yet never truly there.
My heart you did not spare.
Without your love, my life so drear.    

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A Callman Collaboration (Paul Callus and Eileen Manassian)

©January 2022
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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George Avatar
August 24, 2022 at 8:30 PM
Beautiful collaboration, difficult to distinguish the poets' output separately, just as sugar when dissolved in water. Loved this poem of love and longing, especially the fourth stanza......"Each image brought a burning ache. The yearning would not sleep but thundered in the deep. My body trembled in its wake. "
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2022 at 10:48 AM
Thank you, Valsa. Eileen and I have very similar ways of expressing ourselves, and it's always a pleasure collaborating with her. Best regards // paul
Daniel Avatar
April 4, 2022 at 7:44 AM
Brilliant collaboration by two amazing poets, Paul:)
Callus Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 2:05 AM
Thank you for the complimentary remarks, Jo...they are most welcome. Have a lovely weekend, my friend // paul
Manassian Avatar
April 3, 2022 at 6:46 AM
Paul...I'm so late to comment, but so glad that you write with me now and again. :) Always a pleasure writing with you, dear.
Callus Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 1:38 AM
Thank you dear Eileen; I too am guilty of being late in replying! Age is definitely taking its toll :) I'm not as good as I used to be in multitasking. It is always a pleasure to collaborate with. We need to give life to a new cowritten poem :) Hugs // paul
Horne Avatar
March 8, 2022 at 7:21 AM
the two of you write so beautifully together, my friend
Callus Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 1:39 AM
Thank you Jack. I hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul
George Avatar
February 20, 2022 at 3:22 AM
A poem of sadness and longing ! The absence of the person loved leaves the heart aching without end and 'the yearning thundering in the deep' . Great collaboration Paul and Eileen.... Regards!
Laurie Avatar
February 5, 2022 at 4:28 PM
Hello Paul ... a really nice poem indeed. Enjoyed the flow. It's a great collaboration Paul - stay safe Paul - Lindsay
Salehi Avatar
February 5, 2022 at 10:45 AM
Very nicely done... Congrats to both of you.
Skelly Avatar
February 2, 2022 at 7:53 AM
A beautiful collaboration Paul…Delice
Callus Avatar
February 17, 2022 at 2:21 PM
Glad you liked it, Delice...thank you // paul
Chiri Avatar
February 2, 2022 at 12:25 AM
Such great poetry! You always had a way with words!:)
Callus Avatar
February 17, 2022 at 2:20 PM
Thank you for paying a second visit, Brenda :) Hope all is well on your side of the fence :) Regards // paul
Delaney Avatar
February 1, 2022 at 4:55 AM
A wonderful piece and I enjoyed how the enclosed couplets added to the atmosphere- like lingering thoughts. Congratulatiions. to you and Eileen. SuZ
Chircop Avatar
January 31, 2022 at 6:45 PM
What a beautiful collaboration..So glad I found this gem.
Mcconnell Avatar
January 31, 2022 at 12:34 PM
Such lovely poetic touches Paul, nice rhyme and flow too with good expression. Blessings always,Gordon
Callus Avatar
August 27, 2022 at 7:17 AM
Many thanks, Gordon, especially for pointing out our rhyme and flow. Best regards and blessings // paul
Horsman Avatar
January 28, 2022 at 6:04 PM
Wow, one amazing Collab, "Night" a time to think, a time to elaborate in poetry. This truly a magic poetic piece. Soon to visit Eileen.
Callus Avatar
August 27, 2022 at 7:15 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Harry. Excuse the late reply; too many pr8iorities in life! ~ Regards // paul
Thirtyseven Avatar
January 27, 2022 at 4:50 AM
Oh the rhyme and rhythm are just great. Sad as the poem maybe, what a pleasure to read.
Callus Avatar
August 27, 2022 at 6:44 AM
Thank you from both Eileen and myself, Scott. Apart from subject matter, much attention is given to both rhythm and rhyme, something which is very close to our heart. Best regards, my friend. // paul
Messina Avatar
January 26, 2022 at 8:39 PM
Sad, but brilliant, Paul and Eileen. Great job putting this together and collaborating. Regards to both. Charlie
Callus Avatar
August 27, 2022 at 7:08 AM
I am pleased that you enjoyed our collaboration, Charles. I hope you are keeping well. Best regards // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 26, 2022 at 4:24 AM
That longing has a profound presence in this poignant collaboration Paul and Eileen. Sometimes it is difficult holding the sadness at bay. Beautifully composed. Blessings xxoo
Callus Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 1:59 AM
Pls excuse my late reply to your lovely visit, Connie; your feedback is truly appreciated. Warm regards & blessings, my friend // paul
Chiri Avatar
January 26, 2022 at 12:12 AM
The title intrigued me but the piece amazed me!;)
Callus Avatar
January 31, 2022 at 8:59 AM
Thank you so much, Brenda...love your reaction!! :) Best regards // paul
De Beaulieu Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 10:46 AM
Hello Paul Callus, as i read this poem I felt the sadness as I read. Regard Darlene
Callus Avatar
January 31, 2022 at 8:52 AM
Glad you enjoyed this poem, Darlene. Longing is usually accompanied by sadness. ~ Regards // paul
Cunningham Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 7:38 AM
I saw this wonderful collaboration yesterday Paul, you and Eileen work well together. Quite a sad verse tinged with sadness. Hope you're keeping well Paul. Tom
Callus Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 10:31 AM
Thank you for making a second visit to this collaboration, Tom. Yes, this happens to be one of our sad ones; perhaps reflecting how we've all been feeling these past 2 years due to the pandemic. ~ Regards // paul
Pandit Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 6:10 AM
The mood of night sings song of love. Enjoyed the romantic voice of your poem in splendid metaphors. Kudos to you Paul and Eileen for this wonderful collaboration.
Callus Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 6:33 AM
Thank you for this lovely feedback, Vijay, and I am sure Eileen would echo my same thoughts. Regards // paul
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