The Impossible Dream?!

Sitting beneath this pavilions golden crown carved moment ~

Slowly glancing about the crowd; peering into their eyes, their hearts; considering....

Adorned amid such a pretentious cloak!?

Redress this stroke, upon the canvas so brushed

As if the facade could hide, this empty sepulcher inside

Come not with your wilted flowers of hypocracies....

Mist like dew rising within these hollow born roots

Created in the bed so extracted from this, shallow made earths

Contaminated, wherein they have thrived!?

Yet make anew this tilling of your spirits soil

A fragrances sweet aroma for, all their senses to behold ~

Laying aside such arrogance and pride; these preludes, spoken....

Gazing upon stilled wonders embraced by a hush; refrains hopeful anticipation?!

Warmths, loving eyes fixed upon this marvel; what could be

The greatest moment ever written upon the pages of, history ~

Do you believe? What is one willing to give thus, in exchange?

Bleed not this cup of tainted blood but an offering; such mockery....

For "Heaven" waits inside the bejeweled gates amid this, silence and awe

Pondering these thoughts; a sudden twist of a fates possibilities?!

A dawning, of a brand new age ~

What will it be and, what are they willing; this cloak, of many colours 

But only one, shall do.... 

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....The impossible dream!?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 11/9/2009 8:35:00 AM
Oh la..in part II you seem to have left your Garden of Eden, accompanied by your Angels, of course. I find your work to be unique, for you find most of your answers hidden within the questions themselves? Maybe somewhat of an occupation therapy? This portrays your strength of character, but also shows your tender side. Best to you, John Rhinem!!! Blessings to you and yours...Mikki
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Date: 7/27/2009 10:45:00 AM
John, a great second part here where you show your great strength and character that your loving soul possesses and you allow the angels from heaven to help guide you and although wanting and desireing you walk away but, still very much a man of greatness!! Excellent read John. My Love To You Always and Forever, Your Charlene
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Date: 7/26/2009 8:13:00 AM
it takes great strength of heart and soul to walk away from what we desire, but if we can, like you describe within this powerful poem, we are blessed with a different power
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Date: 7/26/2009 7:14:00 AM
A powerful message John, both part one and two, you are an ispiration to us all, thinking of you God bless you much love from diane
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Date: 7/25/2009 3:38:00 PM
great write once more in this part two -a jewel--let us be pillars of light-let not be deceited by lust that blinds the eye--true beauty is bound within the soul,and i feel its bound within the heart too...."let it be said of us"let it be-wonderful message John,i love you faith,you are an inspiration--love charma
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Date: 7/25/2009 1:34:00 PM
inspirational! John! I love it!! jimbo
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Date: 7/25/2009 12:55:00 PM
Bravo for you, John! I am so glad you did not submit to the temptation. And I do believe that out of all the people I know, you would pass this test in real life, rather than risk losing access to the "blessed and blissful shores." Excellent write, John!!!!! Very suspenseful! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/25/2009 11:39:00 AM
great part 2..you should check out some of mine
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