The Image

she met this girl
by the sand pitch 
where they played
and told their darkest secrets

This girl told 
once she was afraid 
of the mirror
because it revealed to her
this other pale little image
that was just scared to lift
its eyes

That image in the mirror
cried tears,desperate tears
that made her 
fear tomorrow
because everyday
her need grew 
but she was 
just too scared to 
stop,step back and say
"i need..."

it slept nights 
in a haunted  house
where five ghosts that 
lived in it wrestled 
to be unleashed
Their power frightened her

that image would
never leave the mirror
because that now,has become
its home
And there its allowed
to voice its endless thoughts
that a human mind could not console
thoughts of a wild mind that do not rest
and can take a wicked ride
on infant hearts 
and toxicate them 'til they 
are colourless

That very image
Is the one you are looking at...
that image 
lives with me

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 12/10/2008 10:22:00 PM
thanks Denis...
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Date: 12/10/2008 10:01:00 AM
I like the narrative to this. It stops well short of hysteria and yet threatens to go over that edge: 'cried tears,desperate tears'; 'to voice its endless thoughts' are such examples. That is a real credit to you as it would have made the poem bland and take away its uniqueness. The flow of the narrative works well for the reader. Some of the stanza structure baffles me a little, but maybe I need to come back to it and read it again.
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