William Kelii Kekaula Poet Concrete

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The Hula Hoop

The Hula Hoop

Capitalizing on any given situation borderS,
On acquisitiveness or generositY,
Where both parties wanT
More bang for theiR
Buck, therebY
CertifyinG
CloseR
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C
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TieS
WherebY
EstablishinG
A permanent unioN

pilot fish eats large
sharks parasites clean so the 
sharks do not eat them

***The above CONCRETE form is the statement described by its shape
The below HAIKU form describes the statement via a natural event
Being well-rounded I decided to call this the HULA HOOP

2019 August 19

*5th Place*

Invitation to Play
~~Sheri Fresonke Harper

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Jeanne Mcgee October 4, 2019 at 9:12 PM So cleaver and cute too~congrats on your top win. William Kelii Kekaula October 4, 2019 at 9:22 PM Thank you ~ Aloha always William

Sheri Fresonke Harper October 4, 2019 at 8:53 PM William, congratulations on your witty fifth place win in the Invitation to Play Contest. The multi-layered shape, sound, interconnections made it really enjoyable to read. William Kelii Kekaula October 4, 2019 at 9:02 PM Thank you ~ Aloha always William

Mark Toney August 22, 2019 at 7:44 AM William, this is a very interesting poem. The first stanza (Concrete form) is the general statement that sets up the Haiku, which is a concrete example (pun intended:) of the stanza #1 statement in action. The poem has balance, not only visually but conceptually, since the statement lends itself to the example, which further supports the statement, completing a circle as it were. Thus, the Hula Hoop poetry form! "And around, and around, and around it goes..." Nice idea, William! ~Mark William Kelii Kekaula August 22, 2019 at 8:16 AM As depicted and perceived, by allowing a poet to conceive a pictorial thought based on human values, then enhance its conclusion concept via a natural phenomenon -- HULA HOOP, thanks for an invigorating morning Mark ~ Aloha William