Hilo Poet | + Follow Poet |
Concrete | + Fav Poem | Comment | Email | Print |

The Hula Hoop

The Hula Hoop

Capitalizing on any given situation borderS,
On acquisitiveness or generositY,
Where both parties wanT
More bang for theiR
Buck, therebY
CertifyinG
CloseR
AnD
H
A
L
C
Y
O
N
TieS
WherebY
EstablishinG
A permanent unioN

pilot fish eats large
sharks parasites clean so the 
sharks do not eat them

***The above CONCRETE form is the statement described by its shape
The below HAIKU form describes the statement via a natural event
Being well-rounded I decided to call this the HULA HOOP

2019 August 19

*5th Place*

Invitation to Play
~~Sheri Fresonke Harper

Copyright © Hilo Poet | Year Posted 2019

Please Login to post a comment

Jeanne Mcgee Date: 10/4/2019 9:12:00 PM So cleaver and cute too~congrats on your top win. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 10/4/2019 9:22:00 PM Thank you ~ Aloha always William

Sheri Fresonke Harper Date: 10/4/2019 8:53:00 PM William, congratulations on your witty fifth place win in the Invitation to Play Contest. The multi-layered shape, sound, interconnections made it really enjoyable to read. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 10/4/2019 9:02:00 PM Thank you ~ Aloha always William

Mark Toney Date: 8/22/2019 7:44:00 AM William, this is a very interesting poem. The first stanza (Concrete form) is the general statement that sets up the Haiku, which is a concrete example (pun intended:) of the stanza #1 statement in action. The poem has balance, not only visually but conceptually, since the statement lends itself to the example, which further supports the statement, completing a circle as it were. Thus, the Hula Hoop poetry form! "And around, and around, and around it goes..." Nice idea, William! ~Mark Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/22/2019 8:16:00 AM As depicted and perceived, by allowing a poet to conceive a pictorial thought based on human values, then enhance its conclusion concept via a natural phenomenon -- HULA HOOP, thanks for an invigorating morning Mark ~ Aloha William