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February 2025, changed the title. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

The house of Crabs, Sandcastle

This is what some will say 
You’ve crossed the line. Time out.  
You’re rejected from the game  
You’re not coming back. So go hit the showers. 
Once cherished, baptized, and sublime 
Asinine. Never enough iodine. Guilty.  
Now crowned in your sins.  
Stoned concubine. The shamed bovine.  
You’re sweaty. You're filthy.  
You crossed the line. Go hit the showers.  
Submerged from the weight of the world.  
Drunk on the blood of the wine.  
End of the game.  It's not even halftime. 
The filthy crime. The shamed headline.  
Once cherished, There's no room available.  
The game is over. You’re out. You've crossed the line.   
Not worth a dime. Stole from the altar's wine. 
Combine, the fowl and swine wine and dine.  
Frankenstein shrine. You're out. Go resign.  
You’ve crossed the line. You’ve crossed the line.  
This is what some will say.

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Poet Destroyer A June 12, 2016 at 11:08 PM G Jay, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@ G. Jay August 11, 2016 at 8:59 PM Awesome Poet Friend Linda! I'll take any criticism and thanks for the welcome introduction.