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The Hostage

I dream beyond these battlements Of islands in the west Beyond the strings and sacraments That occupy the rest My gentle sister, soft and pure Admires her silken sleeves A subtle breeze begins to stir The eucalyptus leaves And like the leaves that tremble so My mind will dance toward A distant archipelago Or ships that I may board And though the only ship I meet Is drawn upon a page, In books or verses I repeat These thoughts I can't assuage I dance in sprays of golden flowers That sprout along a stream I walk along the shore for hours Til night begins to gleam For I'm too young to marry now But houses will decree I ask the wind to try, somehow, to take me to the sea -For Isaiah Zerbst's 'Edmund Blair Leighton' contest and inspired by his painting with the same title

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Date: 5/13/2013 7:30:00 PM
Very nice write. Well done.
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Date: 4/5/2013 9:18:00 PM
Good for you , congratulation Jeremy, you have it, i feel it......Love Terry a 7>>
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Date: 4/5/2013 9:18:00 PM
Good for you , congratulation Jeremy, you have it, i feel it......Love Terry a 7>>
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Date: 3/29/2013 6:07:00 AM
Excellent write Jeremy! Big congrats on your win. Hugs
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Date: 3/28/2013 9:31:00 PM
Congratulations, with your winning poem Jeremy , I'm also stopping by to say hi, and wish you an early Happy Easter, just in case I don't have time to stop by in the next few days. take care and have yourself a good one~ Always & Forever *LINDA"
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Date: 3/25/2013 2:45:00 PM
this one was excellent and I am very glad you made the list. Congrats to you, Jeremy.
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/28/2013 12:48:00 PM
Andrea, thank you
Date: 3/25/2013 1:12:00 PM
Wonderful rhythmic flow in your poem !! Congrats on your win !! I really enjoyed this one !!
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Date: 3/28/2013 12:48:00 PM
Thank you, Debra!
Date: 3/25/2013 11:07:00 AM
Awesome job, Jeremy! Very well-deserving win. I especially love the fourth verse.
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Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM
Thanks a bunch, Heather ;) !!
Date: 3/25/2013 3:35:00 AM
Congratulations Jeremy!! Well done. Hugs Deb
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM
Thanks, Deborah!!
Date: 3/24/2013 7:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest! It is nice to know that others are inspired by Edmund's awesome paintings. I can tell that you put a lot of time into making this a great poem, and I admire that.
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM
I enjoyed writing it a lot, a belated thank you!!
Date: 3/15/2013 11:27:00 PM
So good, I find it hard to believe this writing is original.
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/16/2013 6:28:00 AM
Wow, that's a really nice compliment. I assure you it is, though.
Date: 3/15/2013 2:36:00 PM
Jeremy, lovely quatrain, I imagine myself reading off on a voyage in this poem.
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/16/2013 6:28:00 AM
Thank you!! Me, too. We can be co captains on the S.S. Soup
Date: 3/10/2013 7:03:00 PM
This is like a Robert Frost poem...very grand......Donna
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/12/2013 11:30:00 PM
Wow! What a comparison! :D
Date: 3/6/2013 9:11:00 AM
you really know how to nail the rhyme and rhythm in your poems and they flow so beautifully! i really love this one...
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Date: 3/12/2013 11:29:00 PM
Ilene, thank you. Same for your lovely poems!
Date: 3/6/2013 12:57:00 AM
Nice work, best of luck in the contest...
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/12/2013 11:29:00 PM
Thanks, Raul
Date: 3/6/2013 12:15:00 AM
This is the kind of poetry I like..Lovely
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/12/2013 11:28:00 PM
Thanks, Charmaine ;)
Date: 3/5/2013 9:30:00 PM
wow, you are amazing with this one. I will have to look at that hostage picture again. How interesting that you and I both posted today our poems for this challenge!!
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/5/2013 9:46:00 PM
And thank you!
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Jeremy Martin
Date: 3/5/2013 9:44:00 PM
It was a challenge, for sure. I wrestled with this one..was kinda like a baby alligator.

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