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The Hearse

A foul breath of misty, cold, damp air brushed across my cheek, caressing hair; then, unhurriedly, around neckline while slinking languidly down my spine, which shivered at that, and eerie sound; of a four-beat rhythm; shod hooves on ground. Unearthly screams from deep dark shadows; the murderous caws of old black crows disturbed by a corpse in passing hearse. I held a button and voiced a verse as it passed me by; alas, in vain, I spied my face in its windowpane. Deathly wind drafts in the hearse's wake ravaged through my flesh - and soul did take. Something Spooky 8 to 16 lines Poetry Contest, placed 1st. Sponsored by: Tania Kitchin Date wrote: 05-October-2021

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/25/2021 10:20:00 AM

Terry, wonderful composed with line after line of vivid imagery. Such a creative story - you were the one in the hearse! Gave me shivers. Congratulations on your win!

Terry Miller
Date: 10/26/2021 1:46:00 AM

Thank you, Sam I appreciate your comments; it was one I really enjoyed writing.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 10/25/2021 12:13:00 AM

Great story with depth of poesy. Congratulations!

Terry Miller
Date: 10/25/2021 12:57:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments, stay well.

Laura Leiser

Date: 10/24/2021 4:19:00 PM

This is excellent, Terry! I love how you put your imagery together in such a creative way. You captured the suspense very well! Well deserved top win! :)

Terry Miller
Date: 10/25/2021 12:58:00 AM

Thank you, Laura, for your kind comments.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/24/2021 2:09:00 PM

Terry, congratulations on your first place win, this was a bone chilling superb poem, loved the line about your face in the windowpane!

Terry Miller
Date: 10/25/2021 1:00:00 AM

Thank you, Tania, for your kind comments, placing my poem, and hosting the competition. I find these competitions so inspiring and a great spark to creativity.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/24/2021 12:04:00 PM

spine tingling good Terry, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Terry Miller
Date: 10/25/2021 1:00:00 AM

Thank you, Jan.

Terry Flood

Date: 10/24/2021 11:22:00 AM

Another vote fir the ‘windowpane’ line, Terry. And a vote for the whole poem. A well deserved winner. Terry

Terry Miller
Date: 10/25/2021 1:04:00 AM

Thank you, Terry, that line is based on an old English superstition as is holding a button as the Hearse passes.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/24/2021 1:06:00 AM

"as it passed me by; alas, in vain, I spied my face in its windowpane." I just love this part!

Terry Miller
Date: 10/24/2021 6:33:00 AM

Thank you Caren.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 10/19/2021 2:08:00 PM

Terry, "I spied my face in the windowpane"....says it all~ A chilling tale you've spun. Blessings, Paulette

Terry Miller
Date: 10/21/2021 1:22:00 AM

Thank you, Paulette.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 10/5/2021 12:43:00 PM

Yep, Terry, this is scary...fine writing for a Halloween contest. Good Luck! I particularly liked "I spied my face in its windowpane." That is chilling!

Terry Miller
Date: 10/6/2021 12:50:00 AM

Thank you Milton, I'm not the best at rhyme, but I enjoyed writing this.