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The Green Valley Wood Incident

I'd been working overtime one hot August night And finished about nine thirty; the sky was still bright Took a short cut through woods at the edge of town Was looking forward to a hot shower and a lie down. I passed the empty picnic area down by the stream And then heard what I thought sounded like a scream I stopped dead in my tracks and looked all around Wondered where it came from; the source of that sound. I carried on walking and then heard a loud shout Stopped walking again but there was no one about Then caught movement out of the corner of my eye And through some bushes heard, "I don't wanna die". On the ground was a young girl; stood over by two men She was quite hysterical and was visibly shaken One said" It's okay buddy we're just having a bit of fun" Saw the look on my face and both decided to run. I ran over to the girl and made sure she was okay But I was raging inside because the thugs had got away I phoned the police told them what had taken place And gave them a good description because I'd seen the ones face. She said her name was Mandy and that she was fifteen Then a couple walking their dog appeared on the scene I said" I've called the police and they are on their way" Then decided to go after them determined they'd pay. I could see them in the distance and ran as fast as I could But it looked like they were heading for Green Valley wood A wood so dense you'd stick to the paths once inside A perfect place it was to evade capture and hide. My thoughts were right and that's where the thugs went I sent a message to the police and made sure it said sent I picked up a large stick and then entered the wood And hoped they didn't have a gun, because use it they would. An hour soon went by and I was struggling to see Then I heard a noise and the two thugs stood before me I froze on the spot and thought maybe I should run But I didn't get the chance because one of them had a gun. He then cocked the gun and he pointed it at me And all that went through my mind was my wife and family Then what seemed like an eternity I heard someone shout "Armed police drop your weapon", that text saved me no doubt. Ten officers appeared and one handcuffed the pair And as they were led away all I could do was stare I'd come close to being shot and things may have turned sour The police were full of praise saying "I was the hero of the hour" One gave me a lift home, it had been one hell of a day He thanked me again saying "But for you they'd have got away The grim reaper had got close; I could have been dead But all I could think of now was a hot shower and bed. Written 20th February 2020.

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Date: 12/15/2021 10:12:00 AM
Amazing write Tom!! you write some of the best story poems here!!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/15/2021 10:18:00 AM
Thank you very much Krish, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. I hope are keeping well. Tom
Date: 2/24/2020 9:25:00 PM
Great story Tom! Id be curious how you would end if the police had not come.
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Date: 2/25/2020 3:02:00 AM
Thanks Timothy, I don't think he would have made it home that night. Tom
Date: 2/24/2020 10:50:00 AM
Brave man, a real hero, love the poem, and of course rhyming is my best and first passion - well penned my friend, Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/24/2020 2:43:00 PM
Thanks very much Jennifer, I've tried others but always come back to rhyme. Tom
Date: 2/23/2020 6:15:00 PM
G'day Tom … a good tale indeed Tom. A true to life occurrence is very easy to picture in your verse, with the result a chance of going either way. Thank you Tom - Lindsay
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Date: 2/24/2020 6:38:00 AM
Thank you Lindsay, thankfully the hero of the hour survived. Tom
Date: 2/23/2020 9:43:00 AM
Great story, Tom, I enjoyed reading. But such things have happened when encountering a moment of injustice, the hero with no thought of fear or the consequences runs after then person that has cause the crime. I like that you got the hero safe and back home. I hate to say, but I am one of those people that would have chased, I have done it before when I see someone being hurt. Stupidity stands first in front of you and talks you into doing such things instead of safety.
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Date: 2/23/2020 12:47:00 PM
Thank you very much Eve, happy you enjoyed it. I'm like you, can't look the other way even though it might not be the wisest thing to do. Tom
Date: 2/23/2020 3:04:00 AM
Wonderful narration of a heroic story.. The hero of the story came out and wrote a beauty..
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Date: 2/23/2020 12:48:00 PM
Thanks Eve.
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Eve Roper
Date: 2/23/2020 9:44:00 AM
Good for you, Tom, a hero my friend.
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Date: 2/23/2020 3:25:00 AM
Thank you very much Jenish, The idea came out from an experience I had some years ago, it was night and happened to go out into my garden, at the end saw two youths who had just knocked out an old man, didn't get a chance to rob him though because I arrived. Police eventually tracked them down. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 7:03:00 PM
I see this got a placement with Brian. Big congrats, tom.
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Date: 2/22/2020 8:41:00 PM
Thanks again Andrea. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 7:02:00 PM
I take it this is fiction, because Tom, I gotta tell you, as good as this story was, it was a very stupid thing to go after two guys most probably armed when police have been called! You are wonderful at story-telling, my friend.
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Date: 2/22/2020 8:40:00 PM
Thank you Andrea, Yes, a work of fiction, and yes I. Agree, here if thugs are on the run the police advise the public not to approach the suspects but to call them. If I'd done that here I wouldn't have had my hero. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 6:00:00 PM
Wow, Tom! Amazing story telling ability covering the spectrum of emotions - you had me from the beginning! Congratulations on your top placement!
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Date: 2/22/2020 8:35:00 PM
Thank you very much Sam, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 5:08:00 PM
Back with congrats on your placement in Brian's contest with this fabulous piece of poetry my friend. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 2/22/2020 5:31:00 PM
Thank you very much Ann. Hope your enjoying the weekend. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 2:56:00 PM
You tell a great story Tom, I enjoyed the read..
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Date: 2/22/2020 4:23:00 PM
Thanks very much Joseph, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 9:39:00 AM
An superb piece of writing Tom, full of great imagery and insightful thoughts keeping us in the grip of our seats. Blessings always,Gordon
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Date: 2/22/2020 10:48:00 AM
Thank you Gordon, glad you enjoyed it. Hope you haven't been affected by Dennis. Tom
Date: 2/22/2020 8:47:00 AM
What imagery! Well done sir! I loved reading your poem, what a fantastic story. Thank you for making my day.
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Date: 2/22/2020 10:47:00 AM
Thank you very much Mark, I'm happy you liked it. Tom
Date: 2/21/2020 1:22:00 PM
I feel I have just read a good book for you are such a talented storyteller Tom and to write this all I rhyme - Wow! With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 2/21/2020 2:34:00 PM
Thanks very much Ann, must admit took some time. Tom
Date: 2/21/2020 1:01:00 PM
Wow Very suspenseful story. Tom: That text was quick thinking and life saving. You spin a great yarn. SuZ
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Date: 2/21/2020 2:33:00 PM
Thank you very much Suzanne, pleased you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 2/21/2020 8:02:00 AM
So, so wonderfully written, dear Tom. You are quite a talent here! What a delight to read! Panagiota xx
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Date: 2/21/2020 8:15:00 AM
Thank you Panagiota, I'm happy you enjoyed the story in the poem. Tom
Date: 2/21/2020 7:59:00 AM
A suspenseful poem Tom. Well written! You certainly can keep the reader's attention :)
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Date: 2/21/2020 8:37:00 AM
Thank you very much Heidi, I'm happy you enjoyed it. Often you read stories like this, sadly some end tragically. Tom
Date: 2/20/2020 4:23:00 PM
You held my attention from start to finish--a great story teller you are, Tom. Much meaning your story holds to real life everywhere.
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Date: 2/20/2020 4:27:00 PM
Thank you very much Vijay, I'm happy you liked it. Tom
Date: 2/20/2020 2:53:00 PM
You tell it NICE...Like the way you wrote this...by the way, don't try that again...she was saved, no need to go to grave...
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Date: 2/20/2020 3:00:00 PM
Haha thanks Arturo, I'm keeping well clear, enough of doom and gloom. Tom
Date: 2/20/2020 1:18:00 PM
- A story that could well happen in reality, Tom - We live in a world where many people carry guns ... and it becomes dangerous to help people like Mandy - A great written story - hugs // Anne-Lise
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Date: 2/20/2020 1:24:00 PM
Thanks Anne, you're right, it's a sign of the times now, I've read of many having a go to help others and losing their lives. Tom

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