Kim Rodrigues Poet Triolet

The Green and Fading Afternoon

The green and fading afternoon
as starkness sets within, behind,
long shadows creep, with twilight soon.
The green and fading afternoon
releases brute bubonic moon.
The town folks dream with peace of mind.
The green and fading afternoon.
as starkness sets within, behind.

1/31/2022

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William Kelii Kekaula February 2, 2022 at 5:58 AM Wondrous rhythmic fluidity balanced by the relevant imagery set by methodic words. You've painted a beautiful exposé here, Kim, nicely done, Aloha! Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2022 at 9:14 AM Thank you, William! :)

Gershon Wolf February 1, 2022 at 7:23 PM 'The town folks dream with peace of mind' -- that line makes this poem really work for me. Love the feeling of calm after reading it. Thanks, Kim. Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2022 at 7:29 PM Thank you, Gershon!

Vijay Pandit February 1, 2022 at 5:51 AM Lovely! I enjoyed the voice of your poem. Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2022 at 6:31 AM Thanks so much!

Sara Kendrick February 1, 2022 at 4:20 AM I like this one. It creates a feeling of calm. It flows seamlessly. Your visit to my page was delightful. Sara Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2022 at 5:22 AM Thank you. Do you see the menace looming. Is the state of peace in lieu of or in ignorance of the coming plague? It could be seen either way given our current circumstances. :)

Joseph P. DiMino February 1, 2022 at 3:40 AM Beautiful, Kim! Enchanting. Mother Nature really does go on, taking conscious care, even while we sleep. If only we would reciprocate, as much while awake. Have a beautiful day my friend! Joseph P. DiMino February 1, 2022 at 8:03 AM Yes, read again, now see the ominous stirrings, and warning of impending disaster...Mother Nature needs to wake her children before the dawn of destruction. Brilliant write! Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2022 at 5:22 AM Thank you, Joe :)

Debra L Brown January 31, 2022 at 7:34 PM Hi, Kim You sure have painted a lovely evening scene, enjoyed. Blessings ~ Debra Kim Rodrigues January 31, 2022 at 8:14 PM Should be terrifying. The peace of dreams that knows not what is coming. Thank you ;)