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The Graveyard Shift

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ghostly figures dance diaphanous dresses swirl in the pale moonlight it’s the graveyard shift on the eve of Halloween we’re in good spirits! 10/10/17 Senryu Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/24/2017 7:04:00 AM

Love this, Jan! Diaphanous dresses...clever! Congrats! <3 Kim

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2017 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Kim I loved the alliteration with diaphanous dresses:-) hugs jan xx

Theresa Stephens

Date: 10/24/2017 6:30:00 AM

Congrats Jan well done on your placing xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2017 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Theresa:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 10/24/2017 5:15:00 AM

great chain of senryu lovely Jan! thank you and congrats :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2017 8:57:00 AM

The picture was a lovely prompt LuLoo! I am delighted you liked my poems:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

Date: 10/23/2017 9:48:00 PM

Jan, a great write. It sounds like a happy party.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2017 8:57:00 AM

Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/23/2017 4:31:00 PM

This had the potential of a winning entry, Jan; I'm pleased you decided to enter it in the contest. Congratulations on placing first! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Paul you were correct and i could enter more than one poem and I am delighted luLoo liked it so much:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2017 3:18:00 PM

This one was one of my favorites for its play on words. Congrats, well deserved.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 4:38:00 PM

Thanks Andrea all of your support since i joined soup is so much appreciated:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 10/23/2017 1:55:00 PM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 2:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM

Hey, you did submit it to the contest in the end - very pleased as it's a great entry. Congratulations on your win!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:32:00 PM

I was delighted Luloo got back to me and confirmed more than one poem was acceptable and a top placement was a brilliant result for me:-) hugs jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 10/23/2017 11:59:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Jan, the graveyard shift was my favourite shift, brilliant Senryu. :))

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:30:00 PM

Thanks so much Roy, Luloo confirmed more than one poem was fine and I am delighted i placed so well:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 10/23/2017 10:45:00 AM

Congratulations Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Charlie:-) hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 10/23/2017 7:59:00 AM

Congrats, Jan! How clever!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Dale:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph Soper

Date: 10/23/2017 7:21:00 AM

Well done Jan and congrats...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/23/2017 6:54:00 AM

I'll drink to good spirits! Congratulations Jan :) xomo!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:28:00 PM

Thanks so much Mo:-) hugs jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 10/23/2017 6:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your great win, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:27:00 PM

Thanks so much Subimal:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/23/2017 5:10:00 AM

Excellent write, Jan, congratulations on your win hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:27:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/15/2017 7:54:00 AM

Hi Jan, you can enter the 2nd senryu for the contest; I like the play on words. Go for it, girl:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2017 11:11:00 AM

The rules say 'a senryu' so I don't want to risk submitting the two but I do think they flow together so well. I've mailed Laura but she's not replied and i don't want to risk falling foul of the rules. Hugs jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 10/14/2017 12:04:00 PM

Great pair of Senryu, Jan. Like the others who have commented, I love the "diaphanous dresses" line - sucker for alliteration. Kind regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2017 11:09:00 AM

I love using alliteration as a poetic device:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2017 8:08:00 PM

Jan, I love that word diaphanous you used in the first one, but the second one is my favorite. Love the play with graveyard shift and "good spirits"

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2017 3:45:00 AM

I had fun with the second poem Andrea I'm so glad you read it. i wish i could enter both, I did mail Luloo asking if we could submit 2 but have had no reply so far and i don't want to risk getting the rules wrong. :-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/11/2017 8:30:00 AM

YES! I love this Halloween write my friend! I really enjoyed the twist you gave at the end of the last Senryu this morning! You have impressed me with your holiday treat here, and I thought your use of diaphanous was exciting! Great work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 11:22:00 AM

Thanks Russell I love the word diaphanous and remember seeing a comedian called Ken Dodd and he used it as difannyous negligee which I found hilarious:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/10/2017 9:47:00 PM

nice short piece about the holiday. 'diaphanous dresses' - cool phrase peace and love matthew anish

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 3:07:00 AM

Thanks Matthew, I love using alliteration:-) hugs Jan xx