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The Graveyard Shift

ghostly figures dance
diaphanous dresses swirl
in the pale moonlight


it’s the graveyard shift
on the eve of Halloween 
we’re in good spirits!

10/10/17

Senryu Contest
Sponsored by Laura Loo

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2017

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Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/24/2017 7:04:00 AM Love this, Jan! Diaphanous dresses...clever! Congrats! <3 Kim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/24/2017 8:58:00 AM Thanks Kim I loved the alliteration with diaphanous dresses:-) hugs jan xx

Theresa Stephens Date: 10/24/2017 6:30:00 AM Congrats Jan well done on your placing xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/24/2017 8:58:00 AM Thanks Theresa:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 10/24/2017 5:15:00 AM great chain of senryu lovely Jan! thank you and congrats :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/24/2017 8:57:00 AM The picture was a lovely prompt LuLoo! I am delighted you liked my poems:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman Date: 10/23/2017 9:48:00 PM Jan, a great write. It sounds like a happy party. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/24/2017 8:57:00 AM Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 10/23/2017 4:31:00 PM This had the potential of a winning entry, Jan; I'm pleased you decided to enter it in the contest. Congratulations on placing first! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 4:37:00 PM Thanks Paul you were correct and i could enter more than one poem and I am delighted luLoo liked it so much:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/23/2017 3:18:00 PM This one was one of my favorites for its play on words. Congrats, well deserved. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 4:38:00 PM Thanks Andrea all of your support since i joined soup is so much appreciated:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 10/23/2017 1:55:00 PM Congrats on a fine win Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 2:15:00 PM Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM Hey, you did submit it to the contest in the end - very pleased as it's a great entry. Congratulations on your win!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:32:00 PM I was delighted Luloo got back to me and confirmed more than one poem was acceptable and a top placement was a brilliant result for me:-) hugs jan xx

Roy Pett Date: 10/23/2017 11:59:00 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Jan, the graveyard shift was my favourite shift, brilliant Senryu. :)) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:30:00 PM Thanks so much Roy, Luloo confirmed more than one poem was fine and I am delighted i placed so well:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith Date: 10/23/2017 10:45:00 AM Congratulations Jan... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM Thanks so much Charlie:-) hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart Date: 10/23/2017 7:59:00 AM Congrats, Jan! How clever! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM Thanks so much Dale:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph Soper Date: 10/23/2017 7:21:00 AM Well done Jan and congrats... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:29:00 PM Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 10/23/2017 6:54:00 AM I'll drink to good spirits! Congratulations Jan :) xomo! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:28:00 PM Thanks so much Mo:-) hugs jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 10/23/2017 6:09:00 AM Congratulations on your great win, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:27:00 PM Thanks so much Subimal:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 10/23/2017 5:10:00 AM Excellent write, Jan, congratulations on your win hugs Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2017 1:27:00 PM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 10/15/2017 7:54:00 AM Hi Jan, you can enter the 2nd senryu for the contest; I like the play on words. Go for it, girl:) Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2017 11:11:00 AM The rules say 'a senryu' so I don't want to risk submitting the two but I do think they flow together so well. I've mailed Laura but she's not replied and i don't want to risk falling foul of the rules. Hugs jan xx

John Michaels Date: 10/14/2017 12:04:00 PM Great pair of Senryu, Jan. Like the others who have commented, I love the "diaphanous dresses" line - sucker for alliteration. Kind regards, John. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2017 11:09:00 AM I love using alliteration as a poetic device:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/12/2017 8:08:00 PM Jan, I love that word diaphanous you used in the first one, but the second one is my favorite. Love the play with graveyard shift and "good spirits" Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/13/2017 3:45:00 AM I had fun with the second poem Andrea I'm so glad you read it. i wish i could enter both, I did mail Luloo asking if we could submit 2 but have had no reply so far and i don't want to risk getting the rules wrong. :-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey Date: 10/11/2017 8:30:00 AM YES! I love this Halloween write my friend! I really enjoyed the twist you gave at the end of the last Senryu this morning! You have impressed me with your holiday treat here, and I thought your use of diaphanous was exciting! Great work!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2017 11:22:00 AM Thanks Russell I love the word diaphanous and remember seeing a comedian called Ken Dodd and he used it as difannyous negligee which I found hilarious:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish Date: 10/10/2017 9:47:00 PM nice short piece about the holiday. 'diaphanous dresses' - cool phrase peace and love matthew anish Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2017 3:07:00 AM Thanks Matthew, I love using alliteration:-) hugs Jan xx