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Christmas Tree - Dr. Surya & Associates

There once was a little balsam who was growing green and free, And he hoped that he'd be taken to be used as a Christmas tree. He'd spent all of his early years growing tall and full and straight, The greenest fir in the nursery, thus insuring his joyous fate. It happened on Thanksgiving Day, when a family came to choose That proud and towering balsam, so they paid his nursery dues. To home, they took the little fir, to adorn his spreading boughs With pretty lights and ornaments, and a chorus of "ahs" and "wows". And there he stood, quite diligent, through the holidays and nights, Stunning with his proud display, and his dazzling yule delights. "Best tree on the street!" said all through Christmas and New Years, Until ... one day the family took him down, not shedding tears. And tho' he'd served them ardently, it seemed his time was done, For off came all the shiny trim, all the garland, bulbs and fun. They had treated him so kindly in the weeks of Christmas, past, Yet now they tossed him to the curb - seemed their good will ... didn't last. The trash truck carried him away, with his limbs now dead and dry, His tears of sap dripped on the street, his boughs waved sad, goodbye, For Christmas trees are blessings, but there's always a price to pay - An early end to the grandest life, in a landfill ... cold and gray. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Contest 530 Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 6th Place ~ in the "Christmas Tree" Poetry Contest, Shadow Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 12/21/2018 9:58:00 PM
How sad that this glorious tree was coldly cut, ending up in the trash. Please don't let this be a metaphor for a human life. I'm crying just thinking of that possibility, Greg. Another stunning victory for you. Congratulations! Best wishes, Carolyn
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 12/22/2018 9:57:00 PM
Yes, there are many people who seem invisible to us as they struggle and others who are outright mistreated. Spreading kindness and love is such a worthy goal.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:45:00 PM
Oh, this is such a sweet comment, Carolyn, and I thank you so much! Sadly, some humans ARE treated as badly, (and worse), which is why we need to be all the more diligent in spreading love, kindness and understanding. Blessings, Dear Friend! :-) <3
Date: 12/21/2018 10:24:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Gregory. Well done.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:44:00 PM
Many thanks to you, Line - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 12/21/2018 2:52:00 AM
Oh so sad to 'toss him to the curb' a wonderfully written poem Gregory, congrats to you with kindest Christmassy thoughts Ann x
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:43:00 PM
That's such a sweet thing to say, Ann - thank you so very much! :-) <3
Date: 12/20/2018 2:16:00 PM
fabulous personification and great rhythm and rhyme Greg, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:42:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Jan, and many thanks for your comments! :-) <3
Date: 12/20/2018 8:18:00 AM
Moving, excellent poem, Greg. CONGRATS! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:42:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Janice - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 12/20/2018 5:44:00 AM
Congratulations for your win! :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:41:00 PM
Thank you so much, Heidi! :-) <3
Date: 12/16/2018 8:57:00 PM
I was just as surprised and hurt as the balsam that he was tossed aside so lightly! This is my favorite part, "Tears of sap dripped on the street, his boughs waved sad, goodbye." This was not only a beautifully written poem, it was a great story, too!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/22/2018 6:41:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! :-)
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Date: 12/20/2018 7:09:00 AM
back with congratulations and to FAV :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:12:00 AM
Many kind thanks, PS, that is such a nice thing to say ... I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem!!
Date: 12/14/2018 10:58:00 PM
You have such a wonderful way to tug at the heart when writing Greg. I love the empathy you convey for the proud tree. I am sure this will be a winner as I know a bit of what Shadow likes. This is beautiful! I loved it! Happy Holidays! : ) xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:12:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Dear Connie - I have a prelit fake tree as well, and I love it ... I would leave it up all year if I could, lol! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 12/14/2018 11:00:00 PM
P.S. Since I couldn't bare to take down my tree until March I didn't get a real one last year. This year I bought a lovely flocked fake one that will be used until it falls apart! : )
Date: 12/14/2018 1:20:00 PM
Well done...No different from what we suffer...at the very best a good memory...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:10:00 AM
Thank you so much, Arturo, that's very kind, my friend! :-)
Date: 12/13/2018 9:07:00 PM
Beautifully done,Gregory. Liked the cadence, the rhythm. I took note of how many syllables in each line, and which lines rhymed, because I want to try this style. A beautiful poem for sure. Good luck in the contest. Sad ending for sure, I always feel sad when I see these forlorn trees along the roadway in January, with a teeny bit of tinsel left. They do look morbid.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/13/2018 10:27:00 PM
Don't they?? Me, too, it seems a bit sad that these gorgeous trees give their lives for Christmas, and then are just thrown away ... so revered one moment, treated as trash the next. Thank you for the comment, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 12/13/2018 8:21:00 PM
Greg, indeed this is the type of poem she is looking for (I read her model poem and it was also a story like this one is) You did a GREAT job but heads up, methinks there is a line limit on this one.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/13/2018 10:24:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea, I so appreciate it, my friend! (Yeah, thirty lines max, so I squeaked it in, lol). I went a bit out of my "norm" here, but it was a fun write! :-) <3

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