William Kelii Kekaula Poet Haibun

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The Golden Rules

*Image of To Obey by Pixabay.

The Golden Rules

Since childhood, you're told to, "Obey and you won't stray, do it this way and not that way, then life will not be hard." Easy-peasy makes the world a happier place in life, simply by following instructions. Happily, it goes on ...

five syllables there
add seven syllables here
five more ~ happy now

2021 December 09
*2nd Place*
Haibun- With A Message
~~charles messina: Judged 2021 December 17

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Paulette Calasibetta December 19, 2021 at 5:17 AM Love the cleverness of its profound yet simple message. Congratulations on your win! Blessings, Paulette William Kelii Kekaula December 19, 2021 at 8:28 AM Thank you, Paulette, for your wealth of expressions, seasons best my friend, Aloha!

Marilene Evans December 17, 2021 at 10:45 AM How cute, short and sweet.... Congratulations.... Problem is .... so few follow that instruction now ... the world would be a better place if everybody does... Happy Holidays! Aloha.... William Kelii Kekaula December 17, 2021 at 11:46 AM My appreciation, Marilene, and I agree wholeheartedly my friend, and here's hoping that you and your loved ones have a blessed season, Ke Akua pu!

Christuraj Alex December 17, 2021 at 5:46 AM Great haibun with a beautiful message. Congratulations! William Kelii Kekaula December 17, 2021 at 8:37 AM You have my thanks, Christuraj, have a great day, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2021 at 12:51 PM hahaha. that is so cheeky. I love it William Kelii Kekaula December 12, 2021 at 1:36 PM Ahh, sweet, Andrea, thanks aplenty, Aloha!

Debra L Brown December 9, 2021 at 4:00 PM Words of wisdom Nicely penned. Blessings Debra William Kelii Kekaula December 9, 2021 at 11:32 PM ...and nicely said, Debra, welcoming words my friend, Aloha!

L Milton Hankins December 9, 2021 at 11:51 AM This is good, William. You know, there is nothing that says we can't alter an old, familiar poetry form if we choose, too. More and more I am writing what I please, and if it doesn't fit the mold...so what? William Kelii Kekaula December 9, 2021 at 12:49 PM Hence the phrase, "better than ere", Milt, we prove then improve. I'm always grateful for your insightfulness my friend, Aloha!

Darlene De Beaulieu December 9, 2021 at 11:15 AM Hello William Kekaula, yes this is what we are told when we are younger. Aloha! Darlene Darlene De Beaulieu December 10, 2021 at 11:36 AM Hello William, yes you are right. Consequences would follow when we do not. Your welcome William. Aloha! Darlene William Kelii Kekaula December 9, 2021 at 12:44 PM Consequences follow when you do not, my heartfelt thanks, Darlene, Aloha!