The Golden Cup

there he sat, still an Restless
under the muddy light post
on the Slimy, Cruel hill

the Dust blew in a daze
and Mud spat in his face
the Rain began.

there he watched his home Bury away
his mother, father, sister, and son
fly deep into the waves

the Fog sat in, and sat thick
while the Wind roared in wheezing and pushing
the rain kept on

then came a rich, beautiful man
bearing a clean red cross on his chest
his smile sympathetic, but reason hollow

Depression crept in, slow and quiet
picked a spot and was made comfortable
the Rain crashed hard

but there, behind the clean blond hair
over the mud, and past the dirt
a smooth, white cloud beckoned.

his heart, blackened and crushed.
the Rain, deep and dark inside, had Stopped.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Mehta Avatar
May 21, 2011 at 12:24 AM
Many Congrats Maddie on notching up third spot in Debbie's contest. Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
Dietrich Avatar
May 20, 2011 at 10:06 PM
Congratulations on your win. This one is quite unique.
Buckeridge Avatar
May 20, 2011 at 3:22 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win x
George   Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 8:36 PM
Many congrats on your GREAT WIN, with this sensational narrative, Maddie. Lainie
Brown Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 12:31 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Debbie Guzzi's contest Maddie. Love, Carol
Song Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 11:48 AM
Emotional write regarding a disasturous situation. Love the emotioned conveyed thru nature... Gwendolen
Soulfire Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 8:54 AM
Nature is so alive here. Nice! Congrats on your win, Maddie. Cheers, ~Soulfire~
K. Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 8:32 AM
Very unique take on the challenge, Maddie-- I really like how you personified the elements here, and of how there is hope in the end-- Super Congratulations :)
Richards Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 7:35 AM
Congratulations, Maddie...a wonderful depiction of the blackness of a sad day.
Mehta Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 5:53 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of debbie, Maddie
Sweetheart Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 5:21 AM
Congrats Maddie on your great win in Japan contest.. enjjoy luv..
Guzzi Avatar
May 5, 2011 at 2:54 PM
Hi Maddy! Thanks so much for entering my contest, so far, what you have written is along the lines of what I was hoping for and you have been moved on to the next round, yet, as a reader I would want more, why was the man wearing the red cross's gesture a hollow gesture? where is the cup in the story? what is the cup? And why did you choice to capitalize Restless/Dust/Bury/Fog/Depression/Rain/Stopped? If this was a clearer sentence or message I would get it..but i don't? Please polish this GEM
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